Standing in the moment,
between the first settling snowflake,
and a rose in full bloom.
It is then that we began to dance.
Palm in palm, the tapping of our feet,
in time with the pounding of our heartbeats.
Every step mirrored as we waltz to our song.
Whirling for but a second...
when we become lost.
Feet entwined; our bodies’ rush for one another.
I must be flying above the hands of desire,
only to be caught by the sturdy arms of my knight.
And we are held in the moment
between our first dance,
and true love's first kiss.
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Written October 6th, 2005
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aww this is short and sweet. I liked it! Great Job! Check out some of my writes?
-karen -
this is a great write well done
i dont know what else to say so let my applaud show you how i feel ♥
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The emotion in this, as well as the imagery, is very pure, very real. You didn't hold anything back while writing this, it seems to have a life of it is own, kept breathing by your words. This poem hasa very deep spirt, of love and happiness, and the structure, the wording, everything youy've done to thius was done very well. Good job here, keep at it.
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I think this is an awesome poem. I love the images your words created for me. The wording was powerful and sweet at the same time.And we are held in the moment
between our first dance,
and true love's first kiss."
The ending is just right. Great write!
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Standing in the moment,
between the first settling snowflake,
and a rose in full bloom.
I like these lines best. They evoke such wonderful imagery in my mind. The whole poem does, actually, but thats the part I like best.
I like it. Its so sweet and full of love.
A lovely write!
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