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I dreamt I was crying,

I dreamt I was crying,
not for some forgotten lover
not for pain in my heart.
I dreamt I was crying,
not for some nation
or deprevation.
I dreamt I was crying,
not for death of a loved one
or the missing of a friend.
I dreamt I was crying,
for the phisical pain,
the pain of walking.
I woke and I was crying.

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This might not make sense to most of you, but those with authritus or other similar conditions will understand it.
It isnt just phisical pain but the not being able to do all that I could.
Written October 6th, 2005

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  • SherylM
    November 26, 2006
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    Although I am not suffering from authritus or any other similiar conditions, I think I understand how you're feeling. I've been through that phase of life where I wasn't able to do all that I could due to some... dramatic personal reasons. Blessed be.


  • April 4, 2006
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    It's good. When your sad and alone for a while, it's hard to relate to poeple, and define exactly what you feel, and when you feel it. For me, you've got that, even if you didn't mean to.


  • bogie
    October 12, 2005
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    I feel your pain

    I can relate to your poem, with
    two knee operations I feel your
    pain. God bless you and yours
    and I hope you are feeling better.
    Excellent write