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Goodbye

I will take my leave now,
I must be on my way.
From this path I once trod gaily,
I must now turn away.

I say goodbye with sadness,
My joy has all but gone.
From this point my journey,
Will be a lonely one.

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Don't panic.....THIS IS JUST A POEM!!!!
Written October 5th, 2005

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 12, 2005
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    Smiling

    ...ok I won't panic, but I WANT MORE. Where are you going? This did leave me questioning and wondering. Is she going on a vacation by herself? Is she ending a relationship? Is she finding inner self? Is it all fo the above? Just think where you have led my mind to travel this morning. OH THE POWER!
    I love a poem that just makes me want to join the adventure. Thank you for sharing this one. ~Pam


  • Smirnoff Ice
    October 10, 2005
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    Good poem.I think you worried everyone with this one


  • Barb Davidson silver member
    October 7, 2005
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    Shit i walked back through the door and saw you going out the other side! Glad to see it's not true though...

    Barbx


  • marmalade
    October 7, 2005
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    Oh thank goodness its only a poem, you had me worried there! Nicely done and so sad.

  • Lacyte
    October 6, 2005
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    WOW! You nearly had me groping for words in a huge way here! It must be because you are such a good poet, that this sounded oh so very true and authentic... as if you really were leaving us. My friend, this is another wonderful rhyming and rhythmic write from you, that enthralled me all the way.

    Hope all is well your side of the world?

    Keep well


  • DeepDarkDesire
    October 6, 2005
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    i wouldnt say this is one of your best parts, however it is a moving piece. i think the way this flows depends on the way you read it. i can see the pattern in the way that you read it while writting it. nice to see your poetry popping up on my screen

  • whateverforever
    October 6, 2005
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    Your'e not really leaving are you? this was a very sad poem and I hope that it's just words. Are you okay, cause if you are really leaving, well, I will be leaving too. Who's going to be there to pick me up when I'm feeling low, who's going to be my personal bully? See, you cant go! Take care, hope to hear from you soon.
    XXXOOOOXXXX hugs georgia


  • Lucian Valcor
    October 6, 2005
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    this is sad dont leave me


  • Congruence
    October 6, 2005
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    Hello stranger,

    You appear to be caught between form and meaning here, what your saying is very moving and full of emotion, it is is a little tied up with trying to fit to a pattern. Perhaps free verse would have worked.

    Stil a nice piece, very sad, are you really leaving, you have been very quiet lately?

    James
    xx
    Edited on Oct 06 because ''.


  • Legend silver member
    October 5, 2005
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    Surely this is just a poem and not a real farewell,it is a fine piece , short and left me wanting more but fine all the same.I am sure I will still be reading you in the future Good luck


  • Sherry gold member
    October 5, 2005
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    You leaving here??I hope you will reconsider Margaret. You've been a great friend and sometimes people have to move on I guess.But I hope you will stay in touch and things will work out whatever is going on? I am sorry for the circumstances and hope you will find happiness, peace, and love, in your life. Thank you for all your kindness cards and chats given. Your friend, Sherry
    Edited on Oct 05, 4:54 p.m. because ''.

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