How can you not love her?
Sweet and psycho,
lovable, friendly, homicidal,
The happiest morbid you’ll ever meet...
but deadly, her; no mistress, she!
Quite perplexing is her smile,
behind the smile, a lonely frown;
behind the frown a wave of tears,
behind the tears, bubbling laughter
behind the laughter are her fears.
Behind the fear, where no one treads
the boiling rage that lies within.
I take a chance and journey deeper
past the hatchets and the blades
past the quiet before the storm
and all the love that was betrayed.
I reach her core, what did I find-
a bunny chasing a butterfly.
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on VinillaLace, now gone, and who is a new AP persona that I cannot reveal...!
Written October 5th, 2005
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glad it thrilled, ImpaleRose!
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Aww this is such a sweet heartfelt poem I love it it's innocent but at the same time not what a thrill ^_^ GREAT JOB!!
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thank you, CountryButterfly!
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Yes, just ask Monty Python about that bunny!
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hahaha this is very intriguing! i like how you went through the different stages of her mind and after all the "morbid" stuff there's a bunny chasing a butterfly. this poem has a great flow as well. nicely done!~becky
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Psychologically engaging
Even in the heart of the darkest and crazed, I wist, there is still a seed of good. Your poem is a wonderful psychoanalytical statement - but remember sometimes that seed is the source of all evil too. -
thanks much, Nimbus, darn that trod!
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thanks for the comment, Belle, yes, it is based on someone dear to me, and here on AP!
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I found it excellent, that POV is established right at the beginning...and those descriptions just add to it. It is funny, naughty and yet so real...A good job!
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i love it, its has a wonder ful rythm it was a good write.
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I really love this...sounds like it was written about me some days. LOL And your final line is what seals the deal for me........what was your inspiration? Is there really a sweet psycho in your life or were you just being creative? At any rate, I love this piece.
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awesome write
this was great... a wonderful write.. i cant pick a part i didnt like ...lol thanks for sharing your words with me. -
I like this one especially the ending. She just needs some help doesn't she? This is quite precious.
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WOW... This is awesome AP dad!!! you did a great job on this!! The background is beautiful!!! Keep up the good work!!
Hugs,
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Ah, this is beautiful... It touched me in a way I can't really put into words. It's as if I can relate to it somehow. It's beautiful... I saw no mistakes. It's perfect in every way. Thank you for sharing this... I love it
~Amy
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yes but some layers are better then others and we all have diffrent strengths to us xx
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thank, Cheryl, like Schrek said, 'We are onions, lots of layers!
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wonderful as always
Mr Wbiro, wonderful write, many of us are complicated like this You seem to have put it into words perfectly well done a wonderful write, the twist is amazing well done xx Cheryl
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Awe, thank you veeeeerrrry much, my AP wife! and another !
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My hubby This is a very heart touching write. Seems like you had to peel through several layers to find that beautiful soul that dwells within here but with your heart, I can see how you succeeded. Wonderful job on this poem, it really tug on my heart. I love you
Be Well and Be Blessed
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~grins~
Hmm... I must be getting soft
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Thanks, Jess, and nice to hear from you after your trip!
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Well, thank you, my sweetest! Glad I could affect your aspects!
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thank you so much, Imme... (I can't believe I said that!) you are truly appreciated ♥ !
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WOW
I am not sure what was your inspiration here but...wow...
This was actually quite a poignant piece here that affected me in various aspects...sighs
If we all had such a center
~Swt
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Now the whole poem made me sad as I was reading it, thinking and feeling the poem through and through, then came the ending, and my face lit up with a smile, I thought...that's wbiro ♥
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Wayne! Oh my goodness! This was great! I absolutely loved it! Great job! I loved how it ended; so many people I know are complex like this. There are so many layers to those creative souls that I've surronded myself with. You've done a great job with this.
Hugs
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behind the frown a wave of tears,
behind the tears bubbling laughter,
behind the laughter are her fears.
Behind the fears where no one’s been
the boiling rage that lies within
this was magical, i felt like i was consistantly looking from left to right,, awesome job, hit the nail on the head and again shows your amazing heart and how much love you hold
always
~ vini ~
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