We spoke, the other day,
of Freedom;
and Loganberry jam.
And we thought of Sex
And said
Our Prayers
And
'This is what I am'
I think that life needs none
of these sophisticated ways!
How can we think we know the sea,
who only see the waves?
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wow.. this was just so beautiful in it's simplicity.. I really enjoyed the image that you created.. well done.. I reall enjoyed reading this..
Jetleena
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short and sweet and says it all. I particularly liked the last line. who needs complicated when simple does it better
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there is a lot of things that this poem can mean but first of all, i love your poem, especially the simplicity of the first verse ... i've never heard of loganberry jam... this has such a lightlessness yet gives so much food for thought...well written
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Unfortunately, I don't often have that problem. I tend to blurt - embarassingly so, its part of being Libra. (or at least that is what I blame it on)
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Nice job! Very intresting, the message being communicated is quite powerful through your words you have used to represent. I do really like this stanza:
" think that life needs none
of these sophisticated ways!
How can we think we know the sea,
who only see the waves?"
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Thanks for the comment, Billy. Sometimes one gets a fortunate turn of phrase that seems to capture things. Wish it happened more often. vic
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Difficult to respond to this one. (simpers modestly) but thanks. I value the compliment.
vic
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succinct and pointedly right
sophisticated ways only go on to complicate and compromise our real gut intentions. and i'm just as guilty. think its a condition and, maybe no cure. too scary to come out and actually say what you feel. well, that's me anyhow. loganberry jam has always been a real good diversion for me.
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I too have been struck by the way we talk and say nothing, and listen but hear nothing. The waves are deep and we cannot truly know them. My thoughts...
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Wow. I'm quite speechless. You said so very much, using so little language. This technique makes quite an impact. Makes one think a bit, for sure. Really beyond well done!
~ ~ Sincerely, Janet ~ ~
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This is fantastic, on the surface it reads as a very simple poem but the more I read it it started to resound with hints of a deeper meaning. It has started to get me thinking.
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The last line reminds me of the great mystical poets Rumi and Hafiz. It is refreshing to read such simple true beauty.
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