So you’ve chosen your way and made your mistakes
Oh, and what mistakes they were, being accompanied by such consequences
Now you’re sorry.
Beat it, tramp. I can do nothing for you
How pathetic you look when compared to those with actual problems
Wallowing like a swine in a puddle of dark self-pity and tears spent in vain
You’re disgusting.
Still, give it your best shot and be a good little Jezebel
So you can run off to achieve those false gods of which you crave so much
(as though they could make you worth something)
Blend in with those who look as deceivingly innocent as you
Save yourself the inconvenience of being original
For happiness is much too much a task for a parasite that is you
The epitome of teenage melodrama
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Written October 4th, 2005
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Kinda hardcore don't you think. I don't know how to respond. But uh...I guess I can say that it is well-written, and it definitely gets the point across. I think that depending on the situation..."achieve" could have been very well-placed. From the reader's standpoint, it makes one think that the false-gods are goals.
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No one should feel this way... And how long has it been going on? I am so sorry a heart like syours is so broken.
Umm
I have some glue, I can help fix it...
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thanks for reading my stuff and being concerned. you're great. i'm alright.
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Babe..... You needn't feel this way.........
You are so precious... So great... I love you so much.
You have such great talent for writing the scathing poems you do. Everytime you write it is like a ton of bricks...
Your vocabulary proves your intelliegence, my love. 
I love you baby
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Ouch, Cara! I hope this isn't about me...
You okay? 'Cause this piece is BRUTAL! I hope you got most of it out here, otherwise tomorrow someone's gonna end up with a broken jaw or something. The only thing I'd suggest is that in line 9 or 10 (however you want to look at it), I don't think "achieve" fits quite right... I know there's a word I'm thinking of, but I can't remember it. Otherwise, this piece is awesome--and you said you can't write?! haha, whatever... I love it. I just hope that everything's cool for you, because even though bad feelings inspire some pretty cool poetry, they don't make for good times. I love you Cara, have the fun!
~Kelsey
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