CRUNCH
I hear the leaves and twigs
Under my shoes
SPLAT
The raindrops that fall
Fall on my face like tears
SWOOSH
The cars that pass me up
Pass my by without a care in the world
ZING
Wanting to get home
They fly past at high speeds
SCREECH
The tires of a Dodge squeal
And slide on the pavement
CRASH
I feel the impact of the car
Hitting me at full force
CRUNCH
My body goes under the car
I try to move but I can't
WHIRRWHIIRRRHWIRR
The sirens come closer
I see them but I can't talk
WHISPER
I can't move, my lips won't move
I try to manuver my hands
SNAP
The paramedic snaps my arm
back into it's grossly shape
PUMP PUMP PUMP
My heart begins to race
I feel my blood in my veins
No longer am I here today
I don't know what to do or say
I just know that whatever you do
Don't play on the side of the road
On a rainy fall day
Author notes
so i got really bored..so i just decided to write this
I know that it's not as good as my other ones..i'll write more later
Written October 4th, 2005
What did you think
Comments
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This is very good. It has an almost Musical beat to it that i really enjoyed. I could see this as a song lyric, but to an almost MCR song. Very good wording. I liked the ending where you stopped the sound effetc; thats a really good way to reach the reader.
Blessings
-Lucifus- -
lol, Metal..thanx! i was being really bored and I didn't know what else to do other than a random poem. I know that it is a serious subject but when ever i try to write happy poems..they end up going into death and retribution and so on and so on.
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this is pretty good. i like how you used the different sound effect things, or whatever you call them. some of the words seem funny like crunch, zing, woosh, while it is about a serious subject....i like it though. good job. lol =D
Edited on Oct 06, 10:22 because ''.
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