The fire embers glow in her eyes
Her face shines like the sunrise
Radiating beauty beyond compare
Tenderly she caresses my skin
I feel the love forming from within
By words of affirmation she speaks to me
Her wings spread to cover my shame
Always standing to protect my frail frame
At any sign of danger she rushes to my side
When I’m hurt or scared, she can make us disappear
Or carry me away on her wings to a heavenly sphere
Where love envelopes joy in her affectionate care
Flames from her eyes destroy all who would consume me
Water from her tears restores all the pleasure that eludes me
Breath from her mouth returns new life to my soul
She is neither human nor beast nor anything born of creation
She is a gift of my most delightful imagination
She is my fantasy pet – my ever-present Mind’s Eye
Author notes
An obvious play on words.
Written October 4th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Imªginªtion 1000 by PsydewaysTears.
1000 points, ended October 8, 2005, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was wonderful and easy-to-relate-to, and I'm extremely jealous that I'm not the one it originated from. I couldn't agree more with the message of your poem. The beautiful flow and excellent rhyming just adds to the already present wisdom and grace that lie within the veins of this amazing poem. I think I liked the second and third stanzas most, but it all really does rock! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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the rhyming pattern was a joy.this is a very profound write.it may be a little too deep for the contest,but the sentiments in this are priceless.this write is a prize within itself,but i send my best to you in the contest.
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This was really a beautiful write. Very excellent.
~Stacey~
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I wish I could rhyme like this, and am envious of all you can. You used great lyrical imagrey to capture your ideal pet. I love the originality of this piece! Imagination should always be valued like that. Excellent work, thanks for sharing and good luck.
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very well written
I like this very much. You really keep the reader wondering about her, who she/it is, until the very end. Great imaginative writing.
etherealforu
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that was a very nice poem
i really enjoyed reading this
makes you wonder ... who she is all throughout the poem
thats very good
"She is neither human nor beast nor anything born of creation"
thats very mysterious and a bit creepy
i loved that line
keep on writing and good luck with the contest -
Interesting, it seems that this is describing something involving making your wishes come true through yourself. Or something like that.. interesting. It was a little confusing but I think I understood the main concepts - and those stanzas were excellent. Good job. Cheers.
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"Tee-hee, look at the poem I entered in this thingas'. Anyway, keep up the good work. This poem is a little to deep for this contest, but I like it. I hope you win! ( :: He smiled brightfully:: ) I could care less about points, I just..want to see what people put on my comments. Do win for me okies!?" - Lance Ryan Williams: You are not loved and wanted, you are loved and needed!
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i like it! it was just wondrful. good job!!
~Netta~
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