*Blank stare into no where as I begin my words*
I thought you were the one
I believed our love was as bright as the sun,
but now you have left me abandoned
and I wish that I could stand now,
In this cold place,
as the tears roll down my face,
my heart is contaminated,
my mind has procrastinated,
to stop this,
with my fake bliss..
You have infested my soul with your toxic fumes,
and now sitting here I know my sadness blooms,
I have been messed up,
and now I have to throw up,
these feelings I have for you,
because I know nothing could ever be true.
I cheated on you in the past,
and now you have revenged on me so fast,
but this is the first and last,
I thought I could ever Love someone,
You took me up in your arm,
then I put myself in the way of harm,
you know I was sad,
but now you are glad,
you have your revenge,
Now my mind has to avenge...
because my mind will be a long time cruelty to my heart
in this selfish time that we will be apart.
*tears roll down my cheeks as soft as the wind blowing in heaven*
-The Lost Words of Fluffy...-
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Written October 4th, 2005
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This is really good, me and my ex were this way, i cheated, he took me back only to cheat on me and hurt me. and when i found out i nearly died, i tryed everthing to tell myself that it wasn't true and that he did really love me, but in the end i found out that i was only fooling myself. it seems as if you have taken the words that i could not bring myself to say, and u not only said tha tm but you also put them on paper! this is awsome! -
Good imagery and analogies. One cool thing about poetry is that it allows you to take a common subject and either personalize it or take a completely new view and interesting take on it. If this is a real personal story, try and fictionalize it so it is heroic or empowering or some other twist. That is the fun of writing poetry. Thanks for the words.
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This is very powerful and very emotional write - It holds a lot of sadness in it and you can feel the cold winds of a broken heart dying within you yet we have all had these days and I can tell you that you will make it through this time of sorrow for
Only you hold the key to tomorrow, take a look at everything around you and know that the angles are laying beside you when you weep this is a very brilliantly penned poem and the images run very very deep thank you for allowing me to coment on your work..
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