Monday's Macabre
Monday's macabre gloom hang over me, and it won't let me be.
Tuesday's trouble all the day, and follows after me.
Wednesday's wicked smile makes me shiver down my spine.
Thursday's thirsty for some fun, as I pour in some wine.
Friday's finally showing up, and I can now rest from work.
Saturday's suiting me, as I lie in bed and pork.
Sunday's sunshine promise me that some day I'll be free!
© Jim T. Henriksen
October 3rd, 2005
Author notes
Experimented a little with Alliterations (first letter rhyming), as well as using regular rhyme on this one. The rhyming pattern is "aabbcca", in case you wondered. 
This poem was in Silver Sionnach's contest "I'll Give You A Title... You Give Me A Poem", but didn't win anything... 
Written October 3rd, 2005
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Hi, Shahrzad! Well, every day don't have to be Saturday and Sunday, aslong as it's not Monday or Tuesday...
About the photo, I get most of my images from google's image search. Thanks for the comment, and the applause! 
Jim
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lol...you like everyday to be just Saturday and Sunday for you?
I had another friend who felt the same.
A great photo.Where did you get this one?
Shahrzad
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Thanks, Mel! Wasn't sure if this poem was good, but your comment, and others like it, have made me realize it's not that bad. Maybe it's because it's not following a strict rythm.
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nicely written! I loved how you capture the events of a working persons day!!! EXCELLENT!!!!
Keep it up!
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Thanks for the comment, epitaph. Up at 2:30? What are your new job? Graveyard-shift at the graveyard? (LOL! I found out what your AP-name means.
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Ah, so you are retired? Oh, how I look forward till when I can do the same, but alas, that's many years into the future. Come to think of it, my life now isn't that much different. Thanks for the comment and the applause!
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Thanks, Manoj, I appreciate your comments!
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Well, thank you Udit! I am humbled by your praise!
Your comments and your applause are always welcome. (You could applaud this again tomorrow, you know... )
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this is interesting ...i i will probly relate to it very well ..because i am starting a job ...THAT i have to get up at 2:30 in the morning for.....YAWN* well done nice little wriote and so very true!
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v. good
Well this poem made me smile. Having retired it would seem my week works the opposite way to yours! Week days are peaceful, weekends are hectic.
I like how each letter from the beginning of each day, is the starting letter of your description of each day. Nice one. -
Great write and great poem.Rhyming is excellent.Written with nice sequence.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Jim....this is one of your BEST! I would applaud it as many times as possible. Whoa! The alliteration, the rhyming!!!! WOW! All I'll say is, if there were more poets like u...AP WOULD BE HEAVEN! Great job! This poem was just toooooo good! I applaud you! -
Thank you, Maria, sweet AP-daughter of mine! I always appreciate your comment and applause!
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Hehe, sunday, ahh yes, cleverly written ma friend. Good luck in the contest.
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Glad you liked it, Linda! Explained "porking" to you, but to the rest of you out there wondering, it means to sleep. "Pork like a pig" = Sleep and snore.
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Aw! Thank you, sis! That you liked it this much, make me realize the poem was not so bad after all. Your words and your applause are always welcome! Going away? Ok, see you on thirsty thursday then!
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Good food for thought poem.. read it and reread it .. but good flowed wwell..only thing is (lie in bed and pork)? lol lil confusing but maybe different typing of saying ..to old fashioned here..lol
Linda
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Bravo, Bravo, Bravo!!!
Jim, This is an excellent alliteration. Seems you have no problem writing different forms at all. I thoroughly enjoyed going through the week with you on this. And, to add the rhyming in as well was stunning. Best wishes in the contest bro. Wishing you the sunniest of days as always. Going away for a couple of days, leaving very soon. I'll be back by Thursday the latest. Talk to you then. Love ya bro, 
Joyce P.S. You definitely have my applause on this.
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Better than this? Oh, pick any of my other poems.
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Thanks, Yunaleska! Glad you liked it. I appreciate your comment and your applause, it warms my heart... Btw, how's the Fantasy Realm RPG going?
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Thanks, Victor! I truely appreciate your comment and your applause! Yes, the words are true, atleast in my world.
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The pleasure is all mine...I was impressed with your poetic prowess. If this is not one of your best...I would be eager to know what is.
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Thank you very much for the comment and the applause, Liadan. I was not sure if this was one of my best work, but your kudos make me feel a little better about it. I worked the title back and forth in my mind for days, and all I could come up with was to make some sort of alliterative. Seems I got it right!
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Well I like it! I think this is a great piece! It's written brilliantly and flows really well.
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ah very cleaver!!! i like!!! and is actually very true lol
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And how brilliantly you've done with these alliterations! I wasn't sure what to expect with this title...but you have written something that has raised the bar on the title. Your words exceeded the limits of the title...and that is the sign of a talented and creative poet.
Wonderful job and good luck
~Liadan
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