Dearest Michael S.,
So I thought I should write a long heartfelt letter,
And tell you I can't say that I'm feeling much better.
I miss you so much and wish that we could just talk,
get Sunday morning donuts, mesmerized in our walk.
Oh Dad, how could this have happened to us?!
We were so close, I don't know how to adjust...
My step-dad you were, but now you have gone,
like the real one before you, the same thing that went on.
I took a chance, opening this scarred and sad heart,
gave in to a promise that we would never depart.
But, here we are, haven't seen you in some time.
I could just try to call you, but that place isn't mine.
You are 40 something years old now, living at home,
with your parents that tried to assure you had grown.
I know it's hard for you, and you'd rather not say...
why this happened, why we have ended this way.
Do I remind you too much of my green eyed mother?
I know you are there supporting my half brother.
The one that was born, in turn stealing my place,
molested my children and gave me this disgrace.
I was the messenger, thinking, surely I won't be shot!
but you left me behind with this futile thought.....
I know that in life, bonds like this exist....
But I don't understand the reasons why you resist.
I loved you, I would have done anything for you!
You moved into my house, into my family too...
You walked away, with not even a parting goodbye,
using me along the way, and making me cry.
Do you know the pain that I have had to endure?
The outcast I am because you left Mom for her?
I ponder on how you look in the mirror everyday,
knowing what you have done, what you've thrown away.
Watching western movies on the cloudiest days,
with me on your belly in my love induced haze.
You left me a letter once, said you had gone fishing,
you were sorry for the things that you had been missing.
That was long ago now, and I think I finally understand.
You couldn't stick by me, because of A DNA strand.
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Wow, the rhyme is quite excellent in this and you show your feelings and your emotional state quite well. Your flow and rhyme is also excellent and fit this poem without question to a tee.
Thank you for sharing,
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thank you for entering my contest.
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Very sad. You bring your emotions out very well in this. I like that you didn't try to hide the anger and spite that these things bring around. So many people try to put a happy face on and get all virtue centered... but emotion is real and the longer we wear the happy face the longer it takes to try to get along with the way it is... even if the way it is will never be okay.
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
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You know, when I had a membership, I had the coolest picture with this poem.... hmm.
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Eyes well up I can actualy, sadly enough, relate to this poem a little. My step dad, my half sister, but in my family, its my mom that cheats, and my DNA says that Ill wind up just as rotten as her... this is such a great write, so well done, the rhyming is perfect, not forced at all, the emotions shine through well, and again, was a great write... I love it.
-Ash
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Amazing way you have of conveying such strong emotion. This write was deep and heartfelt, along with sad and painful. It's almost like how I feel about my own stepfather. Good piece, and thank you for your entry.
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long and it needed to be....
a topic like this isnt a one liner
i feel that you worked hard on this to portray the right amount of anger mixed with fear and resentment.. without one overbearing the other... as a reader you trapped me in compassion and at the end did so to the father with that one line.
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Excellent
The attraction of your talent is very strong.
So sorry I am that you were done wrong.
Your ability, charm, class and decorum
Meter and rhyme of poems in this forum
Reflect a good person, intelligent and brave
Who is her own person and nobody's slave
Your poem reveals your talent and charm. --Ellis
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Wow what a powerful write you have wrote here. I am so sorry to here about your father doing this to you i don't have the best realation ship with mine i'ver basicaly like so many other people like me he was a abusive drunk. I could realate to this alot and it makes me want to write a piece about my father and all the fucked up shit he put me through. Thank you for shareing this poem as it was truly a fantastic write.
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This piece is heart rending. I hope that writing is helping you to heal from the hurts. Thanks for sharing this work - I was very moved by it. Write on! -
excellent write
Wow this is such a strong piece. I to know the pain of a father, but for this person (you?) it happens twice my heart goes out . Very heartwrenching piece I feel the pain. I often write of similair pain. Good Luck in the contest! -
i'm very sorry and i dunno if its apropriate but you said you wanted feedback so i thought it courtesy to tell the truth. i kinda got bored half way through, but read on anyway. it is still a good peice aand i dont want you to feel negatively about it, this is just my opinion. take care, much love xx
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This is such a moving piece, I'm sorry for you're loss but this expression of you're pain hopefully helps, as I find it often does! Hopefully things are looking up for you now! Take Care, Love Madispiacha
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Without going into a ton of detail, I can identify with much of this in my own way. Sigh. My heart goes out....
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Wow! The emotion and the subject matter! It is not often that we read or hear poems about step parents. It is sort of a taboo suject. You handled it well! My heart went out to you in this poem. The DNA strand line was really unexpected and great writing!!!
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I wrote a poem ..one of those I give you a title things .. and It was named The Strand .. this was nothing like mine though .. It is a letter and not a poem really.
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This is a powerful piece, your emotion really shows in the write! I can feel your pain and loss, keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more of your poetry soon! Nice job!
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Absolutley wonderful! This is a powerful piece that I will forever cherish. Your emotion pours out to the reader making them feel you pain and loss. Beautiful Beautiful Poem Keep up the excellent work I can't wait to read more of your poetry
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wow powerful write could feel the emotion flowing well done and dont be so hard on your self Cheryl xx
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Wow this is really powerful writing I think more prose than poem but every bit as powerful and heart wrenching this was a very well written work and I applaud you for your strength and character in facing up to a very difficult task and subject yes molestation tears apart families this is good work thanks for posting
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A powerfully emontional poem this is, keep up the good work!
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This was very powerful and emotional. I hope you have moved on now and can find your place in the world. Nice poem/letter to one who abandoned you.
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great work
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when I noticed your poem title, I thought it might be written of me! part of my last name is "strand..." lol...
very touching write mosh. you have a definite voice, very mellow to the point of acceptance and consistent to the page...
hope it all goes well for you.
Jo
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Wow, this is really sad, I love it though because of the heart you brought with it. Amazing job, and keep it up.
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