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One Fatal Expression

 



Just one fatal expression
oozing out of her pores
brings me to the boiling point
of this madness,
her woven fabrics of cotton and silk
shimmer in the night,
accentuating her natural beauty,
which flows like a mythical river
across the desert landscapes of my life,
until, dizzy and weak, I foolishly offer her my hand…


 

To the edge of sanity her images and sounds
take my frayed heart and whirring mind.
I soar to the heavens as she accepts my offer,
and with a pleased look on her face
she leads me to the forbidden realms
of her tried heart and tormented mind…


 

The feelings there, the guilt, the pain
hold magical powers,
and her wondrous stories,
no shortcoming of experience...
I hold her to the point of my complete exhaustion.
I revive upon her unspoken offer of favorable promises
that further weakened my resistance
to engaging in such facts of life with her,
and further into her forbidden zones she reels me…


 

Caught but not bound, slain but not dead,
I feebly resist, but I am completely overwhelmed
by the moment with her, and succumb, responding to her every move
as the designs of nature,
both primitive and genius, intend;
Fast and deep, long and sharp
her essence coursed through my veins
until this natural sequence of events,
played out perpetually throughout all of nature, climaxed,
and reaches the intended conclusion,
where we are finally one.


 

 


 

 


 

 


 

 

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all about the perils of... Amy...!
Written October 2nd, 2005

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  • Porcelain Doll
    December 16, 2008

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    Well... Running through your poetry again, and I found these It seems I've already picked them through for typos hehe. I love this poem as much as I did the first time I read it. Perfection in the form of words. Thank you for writing something so beautiful for me.
    ~Amy


  • wbiro gold member
    October 3, 2005
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    pours/pores, well, my softly whispering poet, as Homer Simpson would say, 'DOH!'


  • whispersoftly
    October 3, 2005
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    PERFECT TRULY PERFECT XX


  • LaMerci
    October 3, 2005
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    Great piece love the stained background matching some of the metaphors in this poem. Beautiful.


  • whispersoftly
    October 3, 2005
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    Mr Wbiro lol what about pores or pours? xx Ms Softly

  • wbiro gold member
    October 3, 2005
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    yes, Ms. whisper, thank you, typing 'here' for 'her' is an idiosyncracy of mine, forever will I be plagued by it! also glad you enjoyed my complete failure to resist 'her'! lol

  • wbiro gold member
    October 3, 2005
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    Thank you, my prospective AP daughter for catching yet another of your prospective AP Dad's idiosyncracies, for I often type 'here' for 'her' for some strange reason... psychiatrist, please!


  • SexyAngel0418
    October 3, 2005
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    WOW... This is awesome!!! You did a great job on this!!! It is very well written and very beautiful!!! Good luck in the contest!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth

  • whispersoftly
    October 3, 2005
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    Mr WBiro You have truly excelled Yourself in this one a brillaint write, it flows with emotion and feeling its brilliant and well done xx one question is it supposed to be : Just one fatal expression oozing out of her pores? or oozing out of here pours? xx Cheryl

  • Porcelain Doll
    October 3, 2005
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    !! Oh dear lol. This was certainly not boring!! Wow... hot write, Mr. Biro o.o Sensual, but tasteful. I only caught one mistake...

    "Just one fatal expression
    oozing out of here pours"

    Her.



    'Kie dokie then. *smiles* Wow... Don't know what else to say about this. It's just amazing... thanks for sending me the link to this, I'm glad I read it! o.o
    ~Amy


  • wbiro gold member
    October 3, 2005
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    thank you, suseann, and I though I only had Campbells Soup pouring through my veins today...

  • wbiro gold member
    October 3, 2005
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    Thank you for the insights, Ms. Love... I went back and wove a few of them into the piece... especially the 'primitive'!


  • suseann
    October 3, 2005
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    Well they asked for powerful.And this write certainly delivers that!Deep felt emotions pour from the veins in it's verses.~~Suseann

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    October 2, 2005
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    This has a primitive feel to it, in that the need and understanding we crave, at times, overcomes us. Really well written, your power and belief shine, the emotion pours and leaves us light at heart. Beautiful.

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