is it easy, for you to see me smile
is it easy, to not care
when i fall, i thought you'd catch me
turn around and you're not there
so now i wonder, if you've noticed
i wonder if you see
that the reason i dont love you
is cause you cant love me
my heart is, getting flooded
i think im going to slip
are you ready, can you catch me
without the fucking guilt trip
can you love me, can you haunt me
so your face is in my dreams
can you see that, I'm perfect
if you know what i mean
when im running, through the sprinklers
would you join in the fun
in all of, those people
you're still the only one
you hold me, in you're arms and
i try not to care
i thought if i fell that you'd catch me
turn around and you're not there
is it cliche, after this all i have to say
you make me happy, is it just me
a storm is brewing around us
but i can only see the loss of trust
it rains on me, but my heart is dry
i cant love you if you make me cry
trust me, you're not the only fucking guy
maybe someone else could take a try
i see the flowers in my meadow
i pick the petals to see what it'll say
its funny, how i get happy
when i hear the whisper of your name
see me smile, though its empty
but she blinds you so you can't see
im convinced that you dont care
though i still feel like we're meant to be
he's been there, he caught me
he makes my smile real
you act like, you dont care
i know thats not how you feel
you could have had me
but now its done
i know id never be
you're only one
so jealous, so tempting
but now i look at the sun
it shines on
it screams out
let me run, let me shout
can i fall, can you catch me
can i feel you there
if i see that, you're missing
you know i will always care
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Written October 2nd, 2005
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dude i havent been on in like a year...so...yea...i wanted to say hello but this is what i really wanna say "whoah" whoah whoah...this is freakin amazing...first off the rhyming..was great...it made the poem flow so well! oh and yes...many boys are so re-freaking-tarded...and its absolutely ridiculous...i can completely sympathize with this whole thing...egh...freakin boys..but i'm sorry not everything works out...and yea...i bet hes sorry now...now that he sees what he lost...hes wantin it back...
but seriously...keep writing that was most definitely worth my time (and i dont say that to everyone)
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I love the flow here, it's almost like racing toward a cliff. The imagery just reaches out and grabs you as does the raw emotion. A wonderfully written poem.
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Hellllloooooooo! I haven't been on in while. Thought I would stop on by and comment on the new piece. I love it of course. My favorite part was; "but now I look at the sun it shines on it screams out let me run let me shout" I can only say that I sympathize as with all the rest. Ass holes, all of them...lol. When you find a good one, hang on tight, because they're few and far between!
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This is amazing! .
it flows sooo nicely!! ..and its funny how many times somebody can feel like this.... great job i love love love it!!!!! 
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this is soo good! i love it soo much!! this is really good!
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awesome
I liked it Hannah, the flow was outstanding, detailed imagery, somewhat of a somber,angry hopeful tone, I absolutely Loved these lines and can relate very well to others
when i hear the whisper of your name
see me smile, though its empty
but she blinds you so you can't see
im convinced that you dont care
though i still feel like we're meant to be
beautifully scripted, keep writing
Ruth
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ok i just read that a second time....ummmmm so its not about luke but about another guy? im confused....but your still fucking LUCKY!!!! lol
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aaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hannah!!! Ahhhh you are sooo fucking lucky to have luke!! and you knwo he loves you! jesus my dad doesnt even call much when he leaves town! ugh well haha that was funny! I LOVE YOU!! this was a rocking poem! see you tomorrow!! peaceout! lol
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