1.
you spent an afternoon
inside
this room.
if you wondered
why I kept looking at the clock,
it was because
you told me
5:30 was the limit and
I was dreading
you saying, "I need
to leave."
2.
I could have been blind
without microscopes
wearing mostly white
and you told me
I looked pretty.
I wonder what you'd see
if you looked through
my glasses:
nudity or emaciation,
lies or fatigue.
3.
a crow landed
on a dripping hot road
and moved just before
wheels
ran him over,
only to fly when he
reached
the other side.
I thought, I could do that.
if only someone would
pull out my shoulder blades
to set up
wings.
4.
love is very different
when you scream it.
that's why
I stay silent
when I hear 3 magic words.
somehow I know
you could pull off
a top hat and cape
and I'd even let you
take a rabbit
from my mouth.
5.
I hated dancing
until I saw you.
the motion of
standing next to me
and speaking at
the same time
is fifth position ballet
in underwater tanks.
6.
if I have dreams
of raining and puddles
you sit in the background
and I think you hug
my waist
when I can't take my eyes
from the window.
I woke up at 4:00
in the morning--so
dark--and through
hazy breathing
I wondered where
your arms were laying
at that moment
while you
slept.
7.
I only hear your voice
when other people talk.
8.
I'm asking if I'm gone
when the impatiens flower
please sculpt the bones
in my back
to a set of butterfly
wings.
Author notes
Megan said she liked it so here it is.
I'm done being lazy (and I'm so lying).
what more can you ask of me
Written October 2nd, 2005
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Wow! I haven't been to ap in a while, but I'm getting back to this poetry thing, and of course your page is the first one I visit, but you haven't written in a while either. Anyway this poem is so incredibly atmospheric and dare I say emo(sorry if that's offensive) because of this poem, I am back in my college dorm room, reliving the many rendevues(man I can't spell anymore) of those days and totally flushed, and cringing, cause it rang so true, and reminded me of times that are such a blur until I read something by you or something similar. And I think 'wow, pain can be so catalystic for art' not that you're in pain, but frustration as it seems, so many of those lines and phrases just totally created time portals that lasted for only a while, until I read the next one, it's kinda like my whole life flashed before my eyes, in segments, during this poem, so amazingly descriptive, and such a warm, inviting tone, that I didn't feel like "I'm reading a poem, I need to read each word" it's as if the poem presented itself, rather like a movie or slide show, so I didn't really notice I was reading, though the words and techniques were certainly noticed and appreciated. Just amazing!!! I love it. Now get back on here and post some more poems!!!
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I think 7. is wonderful the way it is. So much can be said in so little words....
I am glad we have found each other's poetry. I really enjoy the similarities and the differences in our writing. It is like we both jot down the exact in our head and we see it so clearly only to read over later and find that the most amazing epiphanies come to head.....
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superb
Wow.
I can't think of what else to say.
I absolutly loved this. My favorite is number 5.. -
Wow... thank you. Considering I think your work is brilliant, that's an awesome compliment.
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You are a very talented writer. I'm not sure why I haven't been paying more attention to you. But you really are fantastic.
You make me want to write again, and you make me want to write well.
My only suggestion is to cut 7, or expand it. It feels awkward the way it is.
<3 Audrey
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