I see them--all of them down there
some in pain--some without a care
From up here I can’t tell who is who
I’m looking, but I haven’t got a clue
As I search for my friends and my family
Strange people and strange places are all I see
Not seeing any of mine, I search frantically
Have they just disappeared, have they left me?
Now, I am not so happy to be alone
I cry and beg to go home
When I was there I took for granted
their love
I see things differently looking down
from above
There they are...there they are!!
they can’t hear me--I am up too far
I am waving like crazy and yelling too
“How come you can’t see me, I see you!"
Nope, no use, they can’t hear me at all
I miss them so much, I miss them all
Look at them, they are my children
Looks like they are making friends
Oh, how happy they seem to be
I wonder if this is their life without me
Oh no, look Candace is walking off alone
Looks like she might want to go home
My other two children continue to play
Now, MarkE is the only one to stay
Elizabeth is wiping a tear from her eye
Looks like she is really about to cry
Now look, oh goodness, MarkE. is walking away
He is also sad and doesn’t want to play
I can feel that he is doing what is right
He finds his sisters and holds them tight
They are .... they are whispering about their mother
They are saying they "love her more than any other.”
"Where did she go--did she die and leave us?"
"the last we heard she was getting on the bus."
"What has happened--why hasn’t she gotten here
She can’t possibly stay away because of fear
We haven’t done anything wrong-–nothing at all
Why won’t she come--why won’t she call"
I hear them crying for me now every day of this life
Their tears burn my heart their words cut me like a knife
I am on my way home I promise, I swear to you
I just got so lost in the pain, I didn’t know what to do
Stop! No! I am flying higher and further away
If I could just get there, I would forever stay
I know I’ve made mistake after mistake
But the mistake that caused all of this
I DID NOT MAKE
Dear Lord, I need you to help me through
I need your guidance and your love too
I’ll be the best mother, like I used to be
I’ll forgive and forget the hurt, you’ll see
I want to go home and I want to go today
I need you Lord to please, please make a way
Without my babies, the relentless pain has no end
and all I’ll continue to be is "nothing dust"
blowing in the wind
Author notes
For contest: Option 2: prewrite...
Written October 2nd, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Heartfelt by Butterfly Kissed.
500 points, ended January 18, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark, Morbid, Insane, Disturbing Options and Nothing But by xxRainbowDawnxx.
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This is painfully sad and sweet
I see the theme of defying gravity coming through in the acent to hevean or just going somewhere else for a long time, am I wrong?
I really loved the heartfeltness in this, it really came through
I loved the title, it tied in so well with the poem an effortlessly made it beautiful
The rhyme was lovely, effortless and beautiful
The firt few stanzas drew me in and I was no dissapointed
Well done
Good luck
And thanks for entering
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That was so sweet. I honestly cried. It warmed me inside to read it, and cooled my face w/ my cold tears. Thank-you so very much for entering.
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thank you so much for the beautiful comment. this write was one that came from my heart and soul....my deepest pain...all that pain..anyway..thank you again!!!
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This piece was very sad.
It almost made me cry with its longing.
Very beautiful indeed.
Thank you for entering my contest!
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwww I love this poem. I can totally relate... but like Dark-Luna-Goddess said..it's the other way around for me 2. This totally has a ton of feeling in it..which is what I like to see in people's work. Great write, and keep up the awesome work!
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oh, wow that was consuming. know i understand how my mother feels when i was taken away from her. wow... srry im a lil speechless, but i love it, i relly do -
I only started reaeding this poem, as I'm in a bit of a down mood at the moment, this really upset me, but the bit I read, was wonderfullly written and your emotions come through clearly, I'll return one day to finish reading this
Good Luck to you!
God bless
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wonderful
Thank you for entering this poem into my coontest it is very special. I love your poem it shows all of the emotions any mother feels everyday of her life thank you again fo entering this to my contest -
Thank you for entering my contest. Great write. Thanx for giving me the chance to read it.
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Thank you so much for you comment. I will read some of yours, if you don't mind. thanks again for the heartfelt comment.
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This is a lovely poem. Lovely by way of format and beautiful words...but not so lovely in content, though the emotions displayed were. I don't know where the muse was coming from, or what the story is behind this, but this is saddening and beautiful all at the same time. Great job.
Good luck in the contest.
Bestest of wishes and all that other mushy, gushy stuff
~Meli~
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I love this Poem Aunt Tracy....ITS KALEIGH!
Aunt Tracy!!!!!! Hey!!!!!!!! Its Kaleigh, YOUR NIECE!!! loll yea I love this poem its my favorite,i love it hope you check out my poem !! i love you, BYE!
~~~~Kaleigh Jackson~~~~
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very emotional. i can relate to this some way..my mom check herself in rehab when i was 12 years old...had to stay with complete strangers. i was angry with her for a long time for that..still find myself bringing it up all these years later. but this is maybe how she felt when everything was going awry..she thought the only way she could help us was for her to help herself first. which was absolutely true..but try telling that to a 12 year old girl. anyways. bla da...long comment..much to do about nothing....lol...anyways. nice job with writing this. was worth the read. good luck in the contest.
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Excellent!
Gotta say I love this! And not because it ties in with my name. lol. Beautiful write! Great flow and rhyme! Emotions just pouring out in each and every word! Excellent job! Keep up the good work! -
I can relate to your poem right now, but for me, it is the other way around.But there is nothing anyone can do to mend the broken lives we lead.
Please keep up the good work.
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Hey sweetheart!! I started writing and this came out....
YOu know it is the coolest, most comforting feeling to have you read my poems, and know me, from my poems. That is awesome. Just the fact that you remember and link them all together, is so cool. I feel real warm and cozy, not to sound weird...but getting to know you has been heartwarming because you are a caring understanding person, and I need so in my life. Thank you for being so uplifting to me Becky. I hope to talk to you soon. I'm gonna check to see if you have any new ones!!
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This is awesome Tracy! so very heartfelt and i can put myself there above and looking down feeling like the people i love don't know im even there... it's such a scary feeling, but i wouldnt be able to get that feeling if this poem wasn't so well written. the part that really gets me is this~ "I know I’ve made mistake after mistake
But the mistake that caused all of this
I DID NOT MAKE" because i think i know what you're referring to and it's something that is totally unfair to you and your family that you had to go through what you have been put through. i really hope things start to get better for you really really soon and i'm sure they will. anyhow its a GREAT poem! love ya!~Becky -
I appreciate your kindness and understanding. I pray everyday for strength to continue. The man is a twin to satan, I mean that!! If you would, will you read the poem the second fight I win? I think I may have already asked you that .... anyway, that you so much for your uplifting words. I cherish the things that give me hope of any degree, you happened to have given me hope. How can you thank a person for something like that? I am not sure, I just have to say thank you again.
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I read a lot of your poems trying to get an idea of whats up. I have to say that it is unfortunate when we are seperated from our babies, be it our fault or someone elses. I've been in situations myself that have been extremely hard to cope with, but I tried to remain faithful and brave and honey I fought for what was mine. Get youself together and go and get what is yours. I read your poem on addiction I dont know if that really is a prob. for you but let me say if it is I have known the worst addicts and alcoholics around(no joke) and they have overcome it and moved on-- you can to.
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Now that is a very flattering comment and it lifted me up on a day that I was bluer than blue. Thank you so very much.
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The best!
O,I don't know what 2 say....
Thats aPOEM 4 real.
Thank U 4 giving us that.
GOD BLESS U AND UR'S!!!!
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very good
AWWWWW. You know i wish you could be my mother. My parents don understnd me so they don love me. My sis she doesn carew and my brother he has always hated me. You have a great family. And you are an awesome mom. Keep up the great writing.
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