. Radiant quetzalcoatl;
Flaming prismatic
scales shimmering, Wings ablaze in
flashing along elegant strokes of a non-
the glo- chalant grace. How beguiling
rious arc he is, this aerial serpent
of his wri- a fluid motion, entire being.
thing form. Fierce whipped levitating
Golden eyes are feathers slash
Cobalt-fleck in absolute
Stirring winds colored
as we both soar awe.
in the spiraling
storms. Laughing
harsher than the
roaring gales do
Casting aside our
learned senses,as
we descend into
watery lands.To
defend my truth
and protect our
virtues, rising
strength and
mounting fury
become him;
he transcends,
now a heavenly
entity, exuding
luminous brilli-
ance;enveloped
in radiant light
and iridescence.
Now a titanic
song echoing,
pulsating every-
where, fire-opal
dragon. We cut
through water
! and vast skies
Gem to our calming
lunar islands, exotic
mystical dreamscapes-
wherever discovery
beckons coy.
Author notes
My creature is a quetzalcoatl, the winged-serpet god of the aztecs. The god of rain, and a water diety. I put a twist on him, allowing him to transform into a combination of Asian-European inspired dragon.
The name of my pet is Ibassylith, derived from Iblis, the old name of the serpent who tempted Eve, and the mythical Basilisk, the serpent who could turn living beings into stone by making eye contact.
I hope you will appreciate the shape of my poem, as it relates to the silhouette of the quetzalcoatl.
Written October 1st, 2005
A contest entry
- Mythical Creatures (3) by rexi and eso.
300 points, ended May 31, 2006, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything you want by MrCrepsley.
600 points, ended September 10, 2008, 195 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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OMGsh!!
WOW!! I have never seen poetry take such an elaborate form. Plus, this piece radiates with such brilliant imagery. Wonderful write! Well deserving of gold.
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WOW!!!!! This is a really good poem!!!!!! Good Luck!!!!
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the form this was written in certainly got me into it, I found myself reading it without understanding exactly what it was you were saying (when a poem does that to me I know its some good stuf!) my only ‘thing’ I had about this was those little things that branched off which I suppose are supposed to be its wings and tail. I had some trouble figuring out how to read them in relation to the rest of it (but very artistic of you, nice)
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Parts of the poem were a bit choppy, but the descriptions were quite intense. I loved the shape and would applaud this for that alone. I've done the spacing for a couple poems and know how hard it was to accomplish this. Overall though, this was well done!
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Congratulation. Very descriptive words and very creative use of form to create a silhouette of your pet.
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Congratulations on your win for this unique creation.
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Absolutely fantastic ... the style and positioning of the words was absolutley feckin' fantastic!!! I was just completely captivated by the whole poem, think that this is quite possibly a sure winner!! By far and away the most 'professional' poem I think I've read so far today, good luck in the contest with it!! (not that you need it!)
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A multi-dimensional format and out-of-this world descriptions, what's not to love! It would be such a sight to behold to watch Ibassylith carrying you across the skies overhead. I especially like how the wings descibe themselves in their poetic structure the same way the rest of him does likewise. This is easily the most originally shaped-poem entered, and you did it appropriately graceful. This poem makes me so happy as it whisks me away to the dreamy places you depict escaping to. Brilliant! Thanks and good luck!
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Sorry if the poem was a bit confusing, the shape leaves you to interpretation, so any way you would read the poem, from right to left or vise versa or top to bottom, would make it up to you. I thought my little device was quite brilliant, but then again, I tend to be egotistical. Sorry again.
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interesting shape i guess you could say...honestly it was a little bit confusing...although I really do like the words you use in here. Good luck in the contest!
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Wow!! I love the shape of the poem, and the imagrey you chose. The colors you wrote about are amazing. I can definitely visualize this. Your twist makes it even better. Excellent poem, thank you for entering.
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