do you see them comming masters of dark dreams?
do you see them ripping tearing at the seams?
i can hear you comming i can hear you there
i can feel you sick dark breath, going through my hair
i can feel your fingers i can see your eyes
i can sense your deception i can tell your lies
deep red hair that matches your stare, your an ugly shade
once i pierce your heart, you shall soon depart, come meet my blade
you were feared by all
but i will make you fall
with your sudden death, there comes hope
to an army of warriors on a blood slick slope
the demons lines will brake, the mad kings quest will fail
leaving in its wake, the next lines in this tale.
Author notes
yet another though this is only the second one, indeed please respond.
Written October 1st, 2005 bladesrsharp
break my heart
A contest entry
- For Trophy Winning Poems 2 (Elimination Style) by wakingdevil.
300 points, ended April 9, 2006, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
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yay! i like this one. thanks for selecting another choice. im glad you did.
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AP name in author's notes please. =]
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fixed it
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EEEK!
Very dark and creepy!
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haha thank you
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congrats on the gold and the good rhyme. I did say no blood and gore but this isn't too bad I guess. I wish everyone didn't pick on red heads. thank you for entering
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thank you for all of the comments, sorry about it bein a little gorry i was a little over tired when i entered it, thanks again for the comments!
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Great poem
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i love it.forgive me for the short comments i am tired. ... your poems have a refreshing style.
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thank you very much i am honored to have won this contest
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bery nicely written fantasy poem, it was easy to picture what you tlked about in it. cograts on your award.
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THIS IS BLOODY INCREDIBLE! Sorry for shouting, but it is just so good. I love this. For goodness sake, keep writing, and good luck in the contest.
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yes i wrote it after reading eragon
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Very good poem. Well done and it flowed very nicely. It was well written. I enjoyed it tremendously. Thanks for sharing it with us and keep up the good works.
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