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Teardrops of Hatred

A victim to another hater.
That no one even thought of
The way I ease your suffering.
Is killing you again.

When the world won't take you back.
A pain with slow stabs,
You can't live with the pain forever.
The weakness is back again.

Where broken thoughts and tainted dreams ponder,
Make sores with razor claws;
If a dream is all you have
Then I hope you're in a fairy tale.

It seems like  a tidal wave rose to take the stars
You're mystery is like a venom;
It kills what we need,
Only melody and hatred remain to take your place.


Why do you hide in the dark?
Cloaked renditions of an autumn night.
It's the saddest thing to see when angels kill;
With teardrops of blood and hatred of gold.

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Written October 1st, 2005

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  • Risika88
    October 3, 2005
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    Thanks a fuckin' lot! Lol. Thanks girlie, you're awesome. <3


  • UnSaid
    October 2, 2005
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    great job!! I really like the way you have soo much emotion in it!! I absolutly love the ending oh so very much!!! So fucking awesome girlie!! LOL.. Yes another great one i should say!! keep them comming!!

  • Risika88
    October 1, 2005
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    Thanks guys! <3

  • thelovelylie
    October 1, 2005
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    wicked

    i really like this poem its deep i like the use of words


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    October 1, 2005
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    This was a powerful poem. Very good this is as Yoda would say. Keep up the awesome Poetry!!!

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