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Ignore this...

((((my first try at writing lyrics....))))

I picture this song being sung against the background of a guitar and a cello.  What do you think?  What should be the chorus?

"gut instinct"

got airwaves/ and miles to go
white eyes/ pale slivers of green
pounding against black
i miss passerbys/ the hounding
of trucks hitting the pavement
like water shape shifting
to salmons breeding...gut instinct

your white eyes/gut instinct/white eyes come calling

got airwaves/ miles to go
gutting the grand canyon
the pueblo huddled so still...
so still...
so still....

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Written October 1st, 2005

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  • windhover3 gold member
    October 5, 2005
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    I can't say anything, as I am ignoring this.
    grand canyon salmon swishing.