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Cemetery Of Broken Hearts

Walk softly, for wounded love rests here
with shattered dreams of those once held dear.

Through the cemetery of broken hearts I walk alone
finding my way to the gray marble headstone.

At the top it simply bears your name
just as the heart that lies below bears the same.
With an etched epitaph that reads,

“Your love is all my heart ever needs
now bereft of that love it only bleeds.
Here my heart lies in sleep, beautiful sleep
never again to awaken and weep”

As I clear away the silken gossamer strands of a spider's web
so many emotions wash over and through me like a tide's ebb.

I sit down next to this still seemingly fresh grave
and cry endlessly for the loss of love you once gave.

Haunted by the cruel hand of fate that has left me to mourn
thoughtlessly I prick my hand on a single red rose’s thorn.

Quietly I watch it seep into the ground, this crimson flow of my pain
and know that with me your love and memory will forever remain.

Through the flow of my blood and tears I know I would do it all over again
because the reason they flow is I love you still now as I did back then.

I feel your presence as I close my eyes and see your silhouette
and even now with a heart lovelorn and dead I’ve not a single regret.

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German Stars
Written March 15th, 2005

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  • daviscth silver member
    March 3, 2008

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    What a wonderful love poem that reaches beyond the grave. Thanks so much for this wonderful entry!

  • Vampiric Kisses
    November 18, 2005
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    Awww this was beautiful. I could vividly picture everything you wrote about in this; you had great imagery. You did a really nice job on this. Thanks again for your comment on My Dark Abyss!


  • Image and Visions silver member
    October 27, 2005
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    fantastic

    Drk, first thing I have to say is the title "Cemetery Of Broken Hearts " was the main reason I picked this poem to read. the title was interesting. then I have to you did a magnificent job of this piece, you really did/ Though it was a tad dark, the whole thing left me almost breathless. It has an eloquent air about it. Thank you for this piece. great great write. image and Visions


  • afirefly7
    October 22, 2005
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    very touchin..I felt your loss, pain, and love through your words.I felt as if I were there kneeling in tht cemetary.


  • Xxxxxxxxx
    October 19, 2005
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    enthralling eulogistic elegy

    this is great.
    even though it is pulverizingly miserible in its feeling.
    you have written mourning like you were the very muse of heartache it self.
    it is sad that you had to suffer such a thing to write something so well,but i guess that is the way life works....
    -cheers


  • Rose Chloris
    October 18, 2005
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    Great!

    WOAH!!! The imagery of this poem was sublime. Just sublime! This was a very creative metaphor and I'm jealous I didn't think of it lol. The emotion came across so sweet and sad in this. A FANTASTIC write indeed! Thank you for sharing! And even though I doubt you will need it, good luck in the contest!


  • Blood Slurpie
    October 18, 2005
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    :-D


    ~julia~


  • TJCasser
    October 18, 2005
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    Blown Away

    All I can say about this one is that it completely took me by surprise. Powerful, intense, just a mass of raw feeling pulling at my heartstrings. I'm very impressed - thank you for sharing it with us.

  • StormyEyes
    October 18, 2005
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    Wow! Every once in a while, I stumble across something really awesome on here. This time it was this poem, so stark and haunting. I could just picture it in my head and try NOT to imagine those sorts of emotions. I would never wish that sort of pain on anyone. Very beautiful poem. I liked the way you grouped it, two lines, then two more, then three, then four and then back to two lines. Really draws the readers attention to the depth of the mourning they're reading about. And then the end is my absolute favorite part of this piece:

    I feel your presence as I close my eyes and see your silhouette
    and even now with a heart lovelorn and dead I’ve not a single regret.

    Its just perfect. Because I imagine that's what it is like, true love beats even death. I wouldn't wish away time with someone I really loved or regret it just because they were taken from me. Anyway, great poem. I enjoyed it very much. Keep up the great work.


  • -playing-dead-
    October 18, 2005
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    i am rather breathless, this so amazing, beautiful, it made my eyes flood with tears and knowing ur pain, was so saddening,ur imagery n wording is briliant, the way u can display so many emotions is fantastic! gr8 write xxxxxx


  • Niki1227
    October 10, 2005
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    this was so beutiful my friend you took my breath away ,brought tears to my eyes,and made my hands shake all while feeling your pain this is one of your best writes Niki


  • Southern Twilight
    October 4, 2005
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    gosh, i am speechless, this was...a very depressing poem, and i have so many things to say about it, all very good comments. its just so much, i cant write all of it. i will say that this really had deep emotions, and truely a very sad love poem. i was almost crying as i was reading it. it had some vivid imagry to a certain extent, to where i could feel what you were feeling, i could cry the cry you were crying, i could imagine walking along a cemetary thinking about all the losts there has been and all of them once loved, and you making your way up to your loves grave. i felt that the season was windy and cold, leaves maybe on the ground. the depressing mood really set that season, it wasnt described in the poem...but it really brought it out in a literal way. its just amazing, there was so far one other poem like this, that is just so powerful, so sad, shows such true love...love is a very powerful thing itself, and when it is lost you still have it. a truely poetic set right here, i really cried after i read this poem. it is just so sad, and may a rest above your loves soul. i wish another to hope you feel better. i just dont know what else to say, this poem was great, and i wish you also best of luck in my contest.

  • a-crazed-hobo
    October 4, 2005
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    This was certainly beautiful. I liked your imagery here, and I certainly think its a strongpoint of your writing. It needs only minor tweaking, I think, but its still a really strong piece. Good job.


  • Valley of Echoes
    October 4, 2005
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    This was beyond the words of amazing and magnificent. You just captured the moment, and through it i feel pain and longing still, even to love that we said goodbye to. This was wow... I have no real words to praise it, but its one of the best Ive ever read here, Great!

    Tony


  • masterblaster gold member
    October 4, 2005
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    Hi, a very touching poem of a lost love, it has a lot of feel and flows well, a lilting story that moves the heart,I see this is in a comp, it should do very well, a good write my friend, hugs Di

  • itsjustme
    October 3, 2005
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    A good write, this went really deep. Wow is all I can say. It's a great piece, it flowed well, I can't think of any improvments to suggest, so well done. Good job, thanks for sharing.

  • Cobalt Blue
    October 2, 2005
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    Very beautiful sad poem. On your second stanza I think your rhyming could use a little help but beyond that I think this was a beautifully written poem.


  • Frozentearz
    October 2, 2005
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    This was very well written,
    with lots of pondering feelings,
    I love how this ended with such positive
    thoughts of love, I feel your presence as I close my eyes and see your silhouette
    and even now with a heart lovelorn and dead I’ve not a single regret, nice when we can look back after the pain and have no regrets.
    warm thoughts
    Tears


  • October 2, 2005
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    Immersion in your words

    Everything about this poem calls to me to reread the poem again and again. I avoided clicking it, because of the title, due to my own experiences. Yet, when I finally read this piece it touched my heart in many ways. I feel I am there, inside the poem, not just reading the poem. I actually forgot I was reading and found myself Seeing, as-if I were immersed in a novel-- though that process usually takes many pages to accomplish. I wish I could give you a double applause.


  • October 2, 2005
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    There are some adorable lines in this beautiful and touching post. I enjoyed reading much of it!

  • Sweet harm
    October 2, 2005
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    Wow, this poem is amazing. The way you write your words just make the emotion seem much more out there. I wish I could say something, But a lot has already been said.
    Kaitlyn <3
    [P.s - Thanks for the comment on my poem, it was much apprieted (sp?)]


  • Dragonsong silver member
    October 2, 2005
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    Touching

    This is a very moving poem, it really touches the heart, you have managed to capture feelings that are so difficult to put into words. Well done


  • Queen of Cups
    October 1, 2005
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    Fantastic write loved it .

  • Frenchie8520
    October 1, 2005
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    Wow. I'm stunned, if that's the right word. Your diction is very unique.


  • Kurai Namida
    October 1, 2005
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    left me almost speechless

    this is gorgeous! i know exactly how you feel! i've had something like this happen to me recently... i loved him with all of my heart... but i know that he's still here with me... as your is with you... thank you for writing this for all of us to read! this is just a wonderful write... beautiful... wonderful...

  • Brokenpen
    October 1, 2005
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    awesome

    wow and to say what someone put it.. beautifully tragic. this was a great write.. wow. thank you for sharing your worrds with me.


  • AgelessPain
    October 1, 2005
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    Wow thats so sad but so deep...I can relate to it as thats what I exactly i feel,I really loved it..
    If you ever heard about a band called Within Tears,you should listen to a song for them called "In mourning"...Its nearly the ssame about what you are talking about...they got like a conversation between him and his dead lover...
    Especialy love those lines:
    "“Your love is all my heart ever needs
    now bereft of that love it only bleeds.
    Here my heart lies in sleep, beautiful sleep
    never again to awaken and weep”
    Wael


  • faderman1959
    October 1, 2005
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    I think this is my favorite of yours so far! It has everything! Love, loss, passion, pain and longing. All in one poem. Very very good!

  • my-star-is-max
    October 1, 2005
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    very touching, to say the least, i liked the extended metaphor of liking the broken heart to a grave. you must be going through a lot of pain from that lost love, i feel for you and things do get better even if right now it dont seem like that because they dont love you back. lv kez x


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 1, 2005
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    Very moving poem that touches the heart of all who have lost a loved one. To have no regrets is a plus, but one cannot change the past anyway. It is easier to live with oneself afterrwards, knowing they did all they could to make life happier for both.


  • AudreyTyler
    October 1, 2005
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    So so beautiful. Not to mention tragic and powerful. I love at the end how you state that you have no regrets. That shows great strength of character. Just because you've got a broken heart doesn't mean you have to be weak. Rock on.

  • apatisk
    October 1, 2005
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    hmm, this must have been written for that contest held some time ago where the poem had to be titled cemetery of broken hearts. I entered that myself and read most of the entries but i don't remember seeing this before... anyway, tragically beautiful poem.


  • gitu
    September 30, 2005
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    A very moving work, poet. Delightful in its beauty but heart rending in its tragic content. Well done.


  • Juliets toxic love
    September 30, 2005
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    OMG this poem is so sad. what i got (i'm not sure if it's right or not) was that even when someone you love dies life goes on and they are always there with you no matter what happens. any ways great poem and i hope you will take the time to read my poem "pain" i think you might like it lots of love


    ~Jade


  • September 30, 2005
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    omg this was absolutley beatuiful. it touched me to the soul. i felt the heart's sorrow of lost love with no hint of regret. i guess it's like they say "better to have loved and lost than to never have loved at all" or something like that. thank you for sharing this magnificent poem.

  • alonewithoutyou
    September 30, 2005
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    AMAZING!!! love it

    wow. i am in tears. this is utterly gorgeous. beautiful and tragic. i am speechless. you poured your heart and soul into this and left amazing imagrey and emotion. amazing write. love it love it love it. wow. wow. oh wow. just... great!!!!! i will be back to read more of your work and i am sure i wont leave unimpressed.

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