As the first fingers of dawn
Creep across the sky
Light falling softly on your face
Like a kitten licking your nose
I have to stop, glance back
Retract the yawn
And really try
To remember days before this place
When I shared my space alone.
Before my fiction grew to fact
I lacked you one on one
Flesh on flesh in sky high
Swirls of loving grace
Laced thick with life its own.
Sometimes even dreams attack.
No setback of flippant fawn
No asking why
Just loving you above the base
Instincts of yesterday's tone
Stopped dead in my tracks
At the joy of waking to you.
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Well, there you have it. Dedicated to the love of my life 
Written September 29th, 2005
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wow good job, this is really sweet, and touching, great works,
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH that is soooooooo sweet u almost made me cry, sniff, sniff i am a woos! this is incredibly done, some of the rhyming is a little flawed but it doesnt seem forced so i dont care. thanks for entering and good luck with the contest!
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This reads well.
Well I must say that I liked how the poem read. I just read them and enjoy them because that is what entertains me. Your poem did entertain me. -
Thanks so much for the comments, Poo. I don't know that the rhyme scheme has a name. It is just sort of a naturally occuring thing that happens to me sometimes when I start out with freeverse. I sort of refer to it as naturally occuring rhyme because it doesn't fall in the conventional places, or even where I would think to place it. It is one of those sorta gift from the cosmos type things that happens sometimes when I allow the words to just fall out of my pen.
So glad you caught it
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I love your rhyimg scheme. I spotted it right off because it rolled off the tongue so easily. I may give it a try. Is this a style of your own or toes it have a name?
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Thanks so much for the comment and applaus. It was one of those writes that made my heart happy
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oh how pleasent to read, a touch to my heart and the pang of sadness at how i so want that again, a great write i loved the second paragraph as if you stopped in this dreamy reality to see it was reality and a great one at that, very endearing well done lol abigailxx
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