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Sweet Lyrics and a Teasing Melody

_Sweet_ _Lyrics_ _and_ _a_ _Teasing_ _Melody_

And I listen to those soft lyrics you so playfully write upon my thoughts,
One word after the next,
They can’t leave my thoughts
Engraved like words upon a tombstone.
There to stay for all eternity to come.

Those sweet lyrics with a teasing melody.
Not just the rhymes,
Not just the words but also the sweet teasing melodies that dances in the air.
Line after line, a new thought a new reason to admire.
Just a sweet set of lyrics and a teasing melody engraved in my thoughts like words on a marble tombstone, to sit there day after day for all eternity to come.

Author notes

I don't know this just popped into my mind, and I had to write it down. SO yeah express your thoughts tell me your worst.
Written September 28th, 2005

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  • -simply me-
    November 10, 2005
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    Yes, i must agree. I myself don't rlly like it much, what I actually like is just the idea of it, not the poem itself. but thanks.
    Love
    ME


  • Ebrehlac
    November 10, 2005
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    I hope I wasn't too mean

    To be honest...it's not your best. I've seen you write a lot better but then again, I'm not familiar with this form of poetry. I believe it's lyric poetry? Anyway, it's okay. Not your best, but certainly good in it's own respects

  • -simply me-
    October 17, 2005
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    THANK YOU. lol. thanks.
    Love ya
    Coral

  • -simply me-
    October 17, 2005
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    Thanks. I don't really know what made this one spark. I guess I'll have to think about it for a few. Well yeah we'll chat when you are back, cuz we got tonz to say. Thanks again. Love ya. Coral


  • LikexAxMoth
    October 17, 2005
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    wa-hoah! one of your best yet!! absolutely positively l-o-v-e-d LOVED it!!!!!!

  • ShatteredxRomance
    October 13, 2005
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    hey hey hey!!! lol...Great write C-chan!!! no seriously...I really liked it. it makes me wonder why you wrote it. I mean everything we write is conencted to feeling. wonder what feeling made you write this. We'll talk when I get back!
    lots of love!!
    ~ShatteredxRomance~

  • -simply me-
    October 5, 2005
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    Thanks. I think its a bit strange though. And I get what you mean by the colors. This one at first I wasn't thinking of it as lyrics but then i saw a bit of a rythm to it so yeah. and once again thanks.


  • Depths-of-the-Ocean
    October 2, 2005
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    Some times in poetry, there tends to be color in the form of music in what you wish to say, and then the color comes out as musical notes instead of just grey words, know what i mean.

  • Depths-of-the-Ocean
    October 2, 2005
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    Kool. I just wrote a lyric myself not too long ago. And you can't say that this one is bad, cuz it's good. Awesome job girl.

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