If love is red like roses
with a purely whitened heart
And spreads her wings like petals
Then I will be a part
Then I will be a part of you
with all the thorns included
And when somehow they make a scratch
Then I will mend and glue it
Then I will bind the parts together
until they're firm and strong
When love is red like roses
Then in my garden you belong
Author notes
I read the rules.
copyright of the photo belongs to Titia Geertman (JustADutchie)Written September 28th, 2005
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A contest entry
- *~-* The Passion of Red *-~* by Dragonsblood.
450 points, ended April 18, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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nice sentiment, well expressed and to the point
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Short and beautiful! In just three stanzas you were able to exude the color red as if a painting coming into life.
My favorite lines:
When love is red like roses
Then in my garden you belong
The last 2 lines blew me.
Thanks for sharing and see you around.
~VIRGOAN~ -
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awww so cute! It reminds me of one of those poems you'd see on a valentines day card. Well done rhythm and rhyme, short and sweet and cute to boot! I really like this one!
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aaawwww....i loved the last stanza! the rest of the poem was good too, but those two last lines were so sweet!
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Thanks for the aaaaaawww and definitely for your suggestion. I think I will stick to 'glue' in the second strofe, because I think that sounds better, but I've changed it the third strofe. Thanks!
Edited on Sep 28, 5:24 p.m. because ''. -
Hear me go aaaaaawww. That's very sweet. I would suggest one word change though, glue might be better as bind if you tweak it a little.
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