Hammam, my shower dream
By World Ruler's power
I dream that she
might join my shower
freely close to me.
I hug and lean
rubbing you with soap
into sprays so clean
slippery parts I stroke.
You escape my grasp
smile, lean and bend
sliding past so fast
to laughs and grins.
Shower sprays hug, slip
spinning down a drain
or hits, bouncse, drips
as bubbles pop insane.
My finger slips inside
as you shake ride
another behind I hide
slowly dancing I slide.
Your taffy sea foam
inhaled, stretching to cry
churning as I roam
as you sigh, aye.
Your water spray rushes
as your nipples peek
over your breasts lush
blushing full and complete.
Your knee slings elbow
and my firmest part
as shower water flows
enters your wettest dark.
My left hand cups
as I poke, grope
your full round buttocks
you stroke and cope.
Yes, we kiss tongues
grinding bodies and hum
gurgling water licking gums
as tiles tattoo bums.
Oh, my sweetest heart
eyes turn back so
we both fall apart
with legs going akimbo.
Now, you are impaled
sharply scratching your heart
by my rusty nail
bleeding into your parts.
Down we collapse tumble
exhaling into the sky
like tumbling infants fumble
our delights which die.
Our shower rains entire
over our spent desires
as tubs rise higher
the shower, it expires.
We are now clean
to which I say
I love this scene
and dream of play.
by Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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The visions...
You are placing visions of passion...water dripping from entertwined bodies...my...my...my...
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Thanks for being a sweetey niecy. Ciao for now.
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Well I decided to go and read a poem of yours that was a few months old and came across this. That was some dream now wasn't it. And like all the rest of your poems this was written and tasteful. And there isn't anything left to say but good job.
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Even princesses need cleaning. LOL.
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Very sensual and erotic, yum, yum.
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Sensually sweet
Holy moly~
I raed this and said...hmmmmmmmmmmmmm
A shower...takes notes...
Very sensual and inviting...Brings the reader right there with you....
Thank you for sharing this piece~
This line really opened my eyes...
Dearest you are impaled
by my rusty nail
Love that one
and much love~Desire
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yup yup yup
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Wow, that sounds and looks soooooo relaxing... wish I had one of those at home. I'd be in it all the time.... look like a prune I would!
This was warm and cozy. I always enjoy reading your work.
Blessings
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very sensual
Amazigh in your poem you have really give a real image about hammam .Your nice sexy dreams can become reality with the help of Allah swt -
Yes, maam. I know.
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Aww, thanks a bunch.
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yowza! you make it sound like a carefree tumble... I've had dreams of this sort and they tend to inspire great poetry...
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delightful
what a delightful twist to the tongue {or pen} very flirty and tasteful awesome work
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very sensual
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Sometimes a poet like me is all wet.
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Sure was and I didn't even have to get out of bed.
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Its a picture of a regular hammam, sort of like an ancient jaccuzzi with water sprays everywhere. I like the picture too but just like most pictures it is better to put oneself in it.
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You know the deal from our side of the table and they don't know the half of it. Right.
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That was good, Hell of a shower...
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this was really good. . . .where'd you get the picture from
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wow this is very erotical and sensual..what a dream Abdul? who is playing with your mind lately lol jst joking..
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"winks at him and gives a wiggle of her eye brows"
I might tease
But I aim to please.
Don't get me wrong
I forgot my thong?
I never blush
Or get a crush.
Some times I drool
but I'm no ones fool?!
One thing's for sure
Amazigh, you're a lure
you make me hawt hawt hawt o.O
Peace
*lust*
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You tease.
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oooH it was very well done. Hawt hawt hawt! Its very tasteful erotica. I loved reading it. Keep up the excellent work
Peace
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Thanks so much. It means a lot to me.
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From you, great praise indeed.
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I blush as I write sometimes.
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Well I must say WOW! a gem in this one my friend..drooling lol great poem!
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beacause, when you write erotica it's tasteful.
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My hands are not so steady to make a fitting comment to this superb erotic piece. Writers of some erotica should take note, that the necessity for vulgarity can only shock and discourage the reader.
Now I'm off for a cold shower of my own!LOL
Regards................................John -
All things are good and proper in the right context.
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wow, i see you have taken to writing erotica poems again, which i like by the way. ted and i are leaving tomarrow afternoon for jacksonville, florida..helping out with storm recovry for the most part but i'm sure we will have fun too. we are staying with ted's stepmom. we will be there for a month, although most of the damage is in miami.
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Your pen doesn't seem broken to me. Thank you so much. I did try.
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awesome write
omg !!! this was so erotic well done and it wasnt just sex there was love felt in every word which made it all the more erotic.. wonderfully done i loved it thank you for sharing your words with me. -
Your compliment makes me blush. It was, well, just a dream.
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Your poem was largely the muse for this. Your charity I accept willingly.
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I do not see where you could've had difficulty in conjuring this poem...for me, erotic poetry has become a difficult genre since I stay celibate for long periods of time
And I could've only imagined such a beautiful experience. Everything you have employed here, the smooth near-rhymes and the short lines give off a stream of passion that is as warming to the body as a shower. I am very pleased with your efforts. Maybe you should have more dreams like this...
A lovely write. Sorry I hadn't been here over the last couple of days--life has been a little difficult lately. See you soon!
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Every "erotic" poem that I read of yours takes the reader in entirely. You have erupting volcanos of passion in your words every time and this write is another amazing one by you. Perfect rhyme doesn't always bring the perfect write, or read. You use very subtle near-rhyme that only serves to compliment the piece and allows it to flow as smoothly as the water from your shower. It's a work of art and you have no need for the struggle, be proud of this La
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Erotic poetry is difficult for me. I see it as a challenge for a mix of reasons. For me sex without love is like chewing gum arabaica without the spearment or cinammon flavor, tasteless. Still, I recognize the art in such things and to be a good technician I approach it thematically to tell a story and not just wham and bam. Like with pancakes, there may be a little charcoal but the test is did one consume it, digest it, enjoy its look and taste and savor its memory. This is my struggle as a writer and I have seen great ones here on AP continue this struggle. At the top is Anais Ninn who did to eroticism what Picasso did to painting and I appreciate your criticism so much.
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Horny stuff...very good! A few moments where it feels a bit like maybe making the words rhyme has sacrificed some of the clarity of meaning & expression, but the message remains understandable and frankly downright effective..
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