Dappled sunlight,
Field of irises,
Encircled by madrone.
Taking turns taking pictures,
Okay for now;
Our fight forgotten,
Left in our lovemaking
On a sandy river beach.
Now enjoying
Capturing beauty
Through the camera’s lens;
We both love photography.
Four months later,
Partnership over,
Along with the fighting—
Horrible horrible fights—
We couldn’t stop and stay in it.
Heartbroken me,
And yet I do see
I am now on the path
Where I am supposed to be.
Learning love, letting self be free,
Unlearning fear,
Letting go of hate
(for myself and others),
My soul freed for forgiving,
Alone at the river I swim.
On the way back,
A chorus of frogs,
Tiny little babies,
Dozens, hop across my path.
I grab my camera and push
Flower button;
First time since that day,
Brings me rushing back
To the last time I captured
A flower in a photograph.
Dappled sunlight,
Field of irises,
Encircled by madrone.
Taking turns taking pictures,
Okay for now;
Our fight forgotten,
Left in our lovemaking
On a sandy river beach.
Now enjoying
Capturing beauty
Through the camera’s lens;
We both love photography.
Author notes
I did a cyclone; commented on myron's mountain air.
Written September 27th, 2005
A contest entry
- A Form Contest by Sector-Hunter.
300 points, ended October 2, 2005, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Thanks, John! Sector-Hunter's cyclone form (allpoetry.com/Column/674098) fit this experience perfectly, because the simple act of pushing that little button on the camera really did take me back in time to that field of irises.
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I have never heard of this form before. I really enjoyed the read and how it goes back to the same stanzas, much like the repeated moments in our lives.
thanks,
John -
thanks! it was great that SH's form fit a poem i had wanted to get out, and helped me to do so in a way that made it much better than a draft i had written
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Congratulations on your win.
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Thanks for the trophy, SH
i now have one of each metal. thanks for challenging me as a poet with your cyclone form; it was fun to work with.
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Thanks, Ava. although i'm not sure whether i've gotten it "just right," but at least the syllable counts are, lol!
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I've only written one cyclone, for another previous contest of Sector's and I remember the hard work and effort it took to get it just right. You've done a good job here. I love "dappled sunlight." its beautiful. Good luck in the contest hun.
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thanks, granny
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Thanks S-H i had actually written about this event (well, two events: the one bringing up the memory of the other) in another poem that i didn't post, cuz i just wasn't really happy with it; then i saw your form, and knew the cyclone was the way to go because of the flashback. the repetition in your form fit the circumstances perfectly, and this is a much better poem than the first , so thatnks for helping me express what i needed to better than i had without the form's guidance!
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You have created a lovely image here of field of irises - love those flowers and love taking pictures, so this is a great poem from my point of view.
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Thanks for the heads up ohhhhh and you are the first Cyclone and you did a fantastic job with it
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through-the-ca-mer-as-lens: 6 syllables (camera can be pronounced with 2 or 3 syllables; if you're enunciating well, it has 3). thanks for your compliments, and i like your poetry forms.
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I enjoyed this it was really really good you did a great job with this form this was a wonderful poem it had a really nice feel to it thanks for entering good luck and lots of love Robin...aka SH
Edited on Oct 01, 1:01 p.m. because ''.
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