Soft & tender
Like fresh meat
Emotionally raw
optionally hazardous
But potentially delicious
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Written September 25th, 2005
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- Can't Spell BeLIEve Without the LIE by alandriel1138.
300 points, ended January 19, 2006, 23 entries
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This poem sounds like an extremely beautiful woman to me lol. Optionally hazardous but potentially delicious. Sweet little write.
Roz.
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hmm some power images here with deep metaphors. don't eat raw meat, you could get sick! well that comment was about as deep as a sneeze
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Where emotions are concerned, we're always raw meat. And when emotions can indeed cause a dangerous situation. I see this as a "Beware" sign. You may be soft on the outside but tough on the inside.
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I love minimalist verse that speak volumes with just a few words. You've doe a good job with this one
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aha- you are writing from the perspective of the vulnerable one- didn't catch that from the first reading- didn't see that it had a voice at all- that's why the fresh meat seemed so strange...but wow from the perspective of the vulnerable one- that is as poigent as you can get!
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hey! HOW'S IT GOING? HAVEN'T heard from you in ages. Nice to see you around here again.
I have to say I didn't like the raw meat line- but it sure added an unexpected edge to the poem, and makes it stand out- so maybe it is necessary. It makes it more than oridnary. -
we all feel that way sometimes and it is hard not to, lol, i like this poem short and simple and complex at the same time, i love this poem and think it is very inspiring, thanks for sharing,
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