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Fury Of The Falls



All my spirit's senses are awakening,
in the deluge of tempestuous waters.
Rushing over jagged powerless raking,
boulders straddle over edge teeter totter.

Edge's clandestine under currents beckon,
calling entranced waters to a plunging end.
Over tumbling edge flailing deadly reckon,
on a course falling helplessly in it's spin.

White waters below splash and splatter in turmoil,
as the watery rushing deluge tumbles down.
Roars in clashing crashing rumbles muster,
lacking sanity in a blast deafening sound.

          ~~Suseann~~

 

Author notes

this one won a bronze in /kissing-eris and ciscodoo's contest.
Written September 25th, 2005

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  • Autumn Whisper
    September 27, 2005
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    , great poem suseann its great and i love the rhyming too, it works wonderfully nice one, i hope to hear much more from you
    best wishes as always
    Shimmering River


  • Utok Bulinaw
    September 26, 2005
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    Hi sussean,
    First, I want to thank you for entering the contest. This is nicely written, great flow and wonderful rhymes. I agree with Sandi, you have great imagery here, the picture is not needed at all! Best wishes. Eris


  • Puppydog gold member
    September 26, 2005
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    SO VERY BEAUTIFUL

    This is beautiful; the picture and the words are one. A great poem.


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    September 26, 2005
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    WOW you really brought the water to life, Wonderful imagery!

    All the best in the contest! Blessings, Sandi


  • abernaith
    September 25, 2005
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    From this alone I gather you are very passionate. Tis a perfect balance of earth and water, poweful elements that are rooted deep in your heart. You've a gift with words. I pray you use them wisely. I wish you and your muse the very best, and good luck in the contest!
    Edited on Sep 25, 6:29 p.m. because ''.


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    September 25, 2005
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    Beautiful Suseann. I checked this contest out earlier this morning but couldn't get any words to start spinning I see you had no problem at all. Well done and good luck in the contest.

    ~Lyrical


  • xXxJenxXx
    September 25, 2005
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    wow...my entry seems pointless after reading yours!


  • Vickie J
    September 25, 2005
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    ah...Suseann, this is just really awesome. After reading this I am having second doubts on my own You've taken this and penned a masterpiece. Think you can toss me a lifejacket?
    Best wishes in the contest~vj


  • Kukana gold member
    September 25, 2005
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    very poetically written... the picture is beautiful!

    S~

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