The summer's thirsting yearns fair autumn's kiss,
While calmest anguish (loneliness) endears;
When reunited I with whom I miss,
Flies far away from thought and disappears.
Our timeless severances, though high their price,
In fondness paid (and paid with sighs and tears),
And fair advances raised in old device,
Brought desperation down between the years.
Like breath that long submerged refused the air,
Or wings denied the wind whereon to fly,
Such love self justified though seldom there,
So longer life could live that longed to die.
These eyes struck blind by fear have found their sight:
One life's existence made the other's right.
- September 25 2005
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English Sonnet
Written September 25th, 2005
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Very cute and wonderuflly written.
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this was amazing, Absolutely amazing. The picture is a great asset to the poem the background compliments it and the sonnet is just... amazing! I really loved it.
Thank you
Good Luck
Love
Amby
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angelica: an english sonnet is a shakespearean sonnet. They are the same thing.
(you indicated you knew what shakespearean sonnets are).
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Dear David, Lovely description of Autumn where you are, here in Australia we don't get the Autumns like we used to years ago, too much heat.I must admit David, I am only just beginning to learn about Sonnets and I haven't attempted an English one, so I can't critique fairly on it, but I do know that I love the words you have written and the subject you have chosen, also your picture goes beautifully with the poem.
And I'll look at "This dream is love"
Hugs Joan
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You have great penn of autumn. My fav. lines are: Or wings denied the wind whereon to fly,
Such love self justified though seldom there,
So longer life could live that longed to die.
These eyes struck blind by fear have found their sight:
One life's existence made the other's right. Kendhal22
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The words alone you have penned, paints a beautiful image. One that is intense and gripping. A lovely sonnet and a joy to read. Good luck in the contest.
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You did a beautiful job. The intensity of the poem is astounding. It is very well put together and very well formed. It was a joy reading this. Continue the good work. You were one of the finalists for my contest, and I wanted to comment on such a beautiful poem. Great job, and thank you for entering. Beautiful. -
Holly: I share your feelings about artwork accompanying poetry.
I hope not to distract readers from the poem.
This poem is similar "This Dream Of Love", but I think suggests an understanding that the speaker is better off now, notwithstanding how things went in the end.
I'm considering adding this sonnet (slightly altered to match the imagery of This Dream of Love), but I don't know if it would destroy the effect of resolute hopelessness I tried to create in This Dream of Love.
Well have a nice day!
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thanks for showing me to this poem. It was also beautifully written, and of course, not nearly as depressing. I also think the background suits this piece very well also and though it isn't writing, its a clear artistic choice. (i'm big on those.) thanks again.
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"one life's existence made the other's right" a great end to a beautifully written and inspiring piece. well done
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noon: If I had more applauds I would have enough points to increase the bid.
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Excellent
That was awesome!
An Excellent write i must say
i love sonnets and yours really good...
i loved the picture too!
Good Job on this poem!
Keep on writing!
You could try to increase your bid on this poem.... after all it is worth reading!!
NooNi
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I think this may be the first sonnet I have read on the site. I like the style, you have a wonderful flow to this write as well. Good luck in the contest. Athena
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can you explain what you mean by "do match" and "complement"? I don't understand.
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Not a bad piece, but the following lines seem forced among the others and do match the flow of the rest of the poem in terms of complement:
"While calmest anguish, loneliness endears;
When reunited I with whom I miss,
Flies far away from thought and disappears.
Our timeless severances, though high their price"
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I dare say you are the best rhyming poet I have come across on this site. Period. Your bars are haunting. I don't think I've read anythng that rhymes and maintains such impact since reading ym book of Dylan Thomas poetry. Do you perform live? If not, the spoken word scene could use someone of your talent without question.
Our timeless severances, though high their price,
In fondness paid (and paid with sighs and tears),
And fair advances raised in old device,
Brought desperation down between the years
-Gorgeous stanza
One life's existence made the other's right
-Knockout line.
Keep up the good work. (Shall i call you Dave?)-Curtis Meyer
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that is very very beatiful, a lovely write as always well done xx Cheryl and good luck
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