He looked down at her; small and meek.
Her head was bowed; he thought her weak.
He purposed to prove she was a demon.
Lifted her tiny face with his strong rough hand.
Said, "I could kill you easily where you stand.
For I suspect you are a demon."
Her mien was calm, her eyes were wide.
Her hands hung tranquil at her side.
No being e'er looked less a demon.
"Sir, I ask you, grant me grace.
Let us not quarrel this night, this place.
For in the air I do detect a demon."
His snarling lips spat out a curse.
He meant he swore, to leave her worse.
This night there'd be one less demon.
Moments later, there he lay.
Lady Shadow walked away.
He was dead right, she was a demon.
Author notes
Written September 24th, 2005
A contest entry
- Cool, Independent, Badass Women by So Strange.
900 points, ended September 17, 2007, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - what is your kind of magic by j-cole.
470 points, ended January 18, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~ SET the BAR ~ Anything Goes~ Possible of 5750 points handed out! by Florida Sunshine.
950 points, ended February 24, 2008, 182 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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excellent
I enjoyed the read...
I wouldn't change a thing
I have up some new ones drop by
Hugs
Susan~~~
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This poem you wrote in 05, in February 08 you were a honorable winner and than you reposted in on Sept 22, 09. Not sure why but anyway it is a good poem, poetic too with an even flow throughout. End rhyme works well here too and sounds natural which is how a rhyme should be. Take care and thanks for sharing.
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I do not believe you....
...have the remotest intention of revising this 4 year-old poem; nor should you! It is great fun, and well made. I do not care for the association of independent women and 'badass' women. But then, I am not a woman.
Well done!
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Big surprises can come in - small packages !!
A splendid read thank you !!
Best wishes ,
Friend Easy
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Outstanding
This poem works on many different levels. I liked the ending when she shows her hand and the rhyme is strong throughout. I liked the twist and the way you drew her character - it made the ending even more unexpected. Congratulations on the trophy.
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oh boy this is good. i was like " is she a demon or isnt she", the whole time. fenominal
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I like this read a lot. I tread as a story in which I was determined to get to the end and find out just what was what and who was who. You did a top job. Congrats on the honourable win.
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excellent~
Indeed
What a poem/tale you have woven here...
The rhyme and flow is wonderful....
And the last stanza was a clincher for me....
Loved this sweetie
I have up 2 new ones drop by when you can
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Very nice!
wow i love your work, its very inspiring to see what can be done through words in ways of poetry. I thought the rhymes were wonderful! The fact that you brought back the "demon" at the end of every phrase kept me wanting to read more even at the end! Thanks for sharing, I absolutely loved it.
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Beauty can be masked making us all demons. its ironic in your write that one demon killed another...Very imaginative.
return the favor?
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A very interesting and thought provoking poem.
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OK. I’m loving it. It would be so nice if there actually was something a woman could do when some bruiser started giving her grief. (then there’s the trial and the prison sentence) Anyway, I liked it.
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Spooky ~ it's a wicked tale you weave ~ with a twist ~ some may not see coming ~ I liked this ~ you did a faboloso job!
Thanks so much for entering the "Set the bar" contest ~ I do appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ best of luck to you. -
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Comment 2/20/08 / Reply 3/3/08
If I haven’t thanked you already, Thanks for the Honorable Mention. If I have thanked you, Thanks Again.
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very lovely
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very good. she definitely was wrong, don;t know about independent, well i guess she was because she took what she wanted
be well and be blessed
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wow! this is evocative of the persecution of witches.... was that in your mind at all? anyway its brilliant and turns the tables nicely at the end
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comment 4-10-06 / reply 8-13-07
Did I reply? My thought here is "the big, bad man" thinks he will bully "The Little Lady" because - even though he calls her a demon to justify himself - he thinks he can easily subdue her. Little package / sufficient power.
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