Redemption's Rain - an etheree poem by thelordreigns at All poetry

Rain.

Sprinkles.

Splattering,

soaking dry earth,

slicing tough night sky,

seemingly endless tears

of remorse for those fallen.

All needing renewal, hope, love,

crying to receive Redemption's Rain

from the Savior and King of creation.

Author notes

fyi...The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2,

This won an honorable mention in Sector-HuntersA Form Contest 10/2/05.

Graphic taken from einsteinsbreakfast.com/images/old3d/rain.jpg
Written September 24th, 2005

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thelordreigns
October 2, 2005
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Thank you so much. I am missing the writing time I had over the summer.......enjoy your long weekend....
Hawk Feather
October 2, 2005
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Wow teach, that was GORGEOUS!!!! It was really nice to read. It brightened up my day. I love the way you write these poems. I find a hard time writing them. LOL Well, good luck in the contest and keep up the good work!
Sector-Hunter
September 26, 2005
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Oh my this was really well done nice job on the form and the flow was great I like the feel of this poem and the pic is really nice thanks for entering good luck and lots of love Robin...aka SH
Andu
September 26, 2005
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This is another wonderful write by you, you have intergrated the vocabulary and the form together so perfectly. I like the way you've set background for the poem, and then introduced the Christian theme in clearly at the end. Awesome write!
Sai Babas Lotus
September 25, 2005
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Very nice work!
Wow! This is a nice poem with a beautiful title and a wonderful form. I didn't know anything about this form until I got to this poem and read yours and the comments. You've got the syllable count down perfect.

Thank you for introducing me to this lovely form. I'll have to try this sometime

All the best in the contest!

Charishma
Sherry
September 24, 2005
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Oh Joanne, I loved this these I believe are your best. I know I sure need the redemption rain to be filled with more of Christ and feel His love more and know just how much beautiful.
This reflections the closeness of the Lord's touch upon a heart and yet the person and that seeking within. Love ya, Me ♥
afirefly7
September 24, 2005
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I dnt know much about this form but this was a good write great job
Your Hine Us
September 24, 2005
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Like the way this poem had meaning to it,and the flow was smooth and I just plain like it .
Uhs Feth Malorn
September 24, 2005
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Good
I change my vote. I read it again and it captured me more the second time. I was drinking some pop the first time. Sorry!
Uhs Feth Malorn
September 24, 2005
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Good
This is good, but it is not really my sort of poetry. Please don't be offended. I will read some more of your work and probably it will be better than mine anyway. Keep writing!
sweetiepie694501
September 24, 2005
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excellent
oh wow. this was excellent. Just a first glimpse of the poem had me hooked. not only does it sound good but it also looks very good. This was very beautiful, very creative, this must have been quite a challenge for you capturing such beautiful images in such few words. I donot know how you did it, but you did. And you did a great job. your words flow from your pen as smoothly as a knife slicing through butter. i love it. very good job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
too young to die
September 24, 2005
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lovely picture ..'n wonderful portrayal....awesome i liked it ..good job...
grannyeri
September 24, 2005
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Creative shape made with words. Words say much and giveus images of peace and tranquility. Nice write.
becks place
September 24, 2005
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well-done!
Beautiful! What else can be said? You took the strict rules of etheree and created a masterpiece.
Lancea Optimus
September 24, 2005
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Good work, I really like the title.
Donjo1030
September 24, 2005
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excellent
Beautiful Joanne!!!
You have penned a wonderful write. Redemption's rain what a title to be praised and glory to Him. This is in perfect form and a blessing to read.
Good luck in the contest!!!!
Praise God!!!!!!!!!
thelordreigns
September 24, 2005
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Thank you Paula....you are too kind. It is a great form though! Thank you again. Love and hugs - joanne
LdyBrknWing
September 24, 2005
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Hey girl! This is a wonderful etheree! (I only discovered the form for the first time this last week! It's so cool!) You did a beautiful job with this! I love anything to do with the rain, and you descriptions here were perfect! You've got the form nailed down perfectly, too! Fabulous work, girl! Much luck in the contest!
Paula