Why do you take pleasure turning me into knots,
tearing me inside out, invading all of my thoughts?
Why is nothing I do good enough?
My laugh, my heart,
and love is not what you want.
Why do I keep, showing you my soul?
Thinking it will make a difference,
so maybe you wont go.
Why are you so cold?
Never really let me see,
a softer side to you that is a reflection of me.
Why do I do this?
My love deserves better,
but you damn fool
I want us to be together!
Why do I ask why?
I'll never really know,
so for now I will just cry,
trying to let you go.
Author notes
Hey sweetie, I'm here because you asked me to be and I did the best I could. I hope you like it. Don't let the hard times bring you down.
Renee
Written September 24th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Broken Love (CONTEST) by Sharkbaitoolala.
700 points, ended September 28, 2005, 15 entries
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Amazing is all I can say. I've been through a similar situation and you hit it dead on. Awesome piece of work.
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You've really done a great job presenting the feelings of so many people whose hearts are broken. These are questions I've asked many times in my life. I look forward to reading more of your work. Much love to you and yours,
Nicole
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I love this poem!
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this asked a lot of question and we often wondered why we do these things..great poem...
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This is beautiful. You brought these feelings out perfectly. I can relate to this. It's like you took the thoughts out of my head and wrote them the way I've been trying to. Awsome. Great Job. I will have to read more of your work.
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YO! SOME QUESTIONS ARE NOT MEANT TO BE UNSWERED. I LIKE YO SIMPLE COMPLICATED POETRY STYLE KEEP IT LIKE THAT.
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i really liked this.. it is so sad... but i liked it . you write so well. i wish i could write like this..
dee -
you really wrote this so well, Ive been through what your words portray, well we all have I guess, I especially liked the line,
Why are you so cold?
Never really let me see,
a softer side to you that is a reflection of me
this is how I felt, how I still feel, of a friendship turned cold, anyway another good write by you, good luck in the contest. -
talented!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I loved this, so very sad and emotionl, but yet very good. It hard when we love someone and they dont seem to see or know that, well who ever he is he need to open his eyes, you sound so nice.
I loved your name, you are so very right.
Mary -
thats a really good poem, that remind me of an relationship i wuz in
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v. good
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OMG I LOVE THIS POEM!! I completely relate...I gave a guy my heart and soul for 11 months he moves away and then a week after we break up he goes and gets another gf and tell me he still loves me but hes still hurting her behind her back!! MEN!! I compleletly love this poem it touched my heart!! ~ALICHIA
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Wow!
Wow, How can one express or even critique such a personal masterpiece as this, I mean this is beautiful. You have expressed the emotions very well and the hardships I know all too well that must be endured. You are a quite a writer, poet and friend and I appauld you on this poem. I hope you win a trophy ... 
Sara
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this was awsome..... Every part...
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Another good one Renee! And its a feeling we all can relate to.
Ps. thank you for the Birthday card!
Love and Light
Denise -
AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!YOU HAVE DONE A GRETA JOB> KEEP USING YOUR TALENT ITS AMAZING!!! GOOD LUCK!!!
Love Sandra -
Well Done!
A very heart-moving piece my friend, nice flow, and wonderfully expressed in it's sadness...Hope all is well, much love to you and yours!
-Timothy
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