The reaper comes to destroy greed,
of those who refuse to see a need.
Of compassion for his fellow man,
he's wielding justice sword in hand.
Flying cross darkened sky on steed,
he captures unyielding souls of greed.
Those of gleeful narrow vision stunted,
who relish selfishness are always hunted.
So change your course while you still can,
show true compassion for your fellow man.
When he drags your soul down deep to suffer,
there's no reversing your loss once discovered.
From his glowing vision you cannot hide,
he seeks out hypocrisy lurking on the inside.
Striking a balance with a double edged sword,
better travel the strait and narrow or be abhors.
~~~Suseann~~~
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Written September 24th, 2005
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When I first saw the picture, I thought of the reaper as well. Very nicely done. Loved the beat and flow. Thank you for entering.
Sam
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Great flow to this piece, and thought provoking. We only have this one life, how will we choose to live it?
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excellent
Excellent write!!!
This is just an exquisite representation of the picture. I wrote something along the same lines. But nothing to compare to this fabulous write. With a strong message of truth a what shall be to those who live in darkness.
Good luck in the contest a winner in my eyes
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Carried further.
In mine I had a child that was laying on the ground and I based mine on the theme Pale Rider and she looked up to see them coming only as you put it to eliminate the need for greed, the rider was doing justice to the man that raped her. In other words his deeds was his undoing and the rider of death rode to eliminate him from the world. So one never knows when the rider will ride so we had best be prepared for when he does ride or else he do as you wrote in your poem. That was indeed very clever and intuiative. A lot of insight was written into your poem. -
I'm sure you can take it a bit further then this.Illuminate that thought Poet!Cousin!
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Good luck in contest.
You know this is similiar to what I have kicking around in my head and well one thing for sure the reaper does ride for us all. We truly must be prepared in order know what is out that lures us away from the light. I agree this one flows really well here. -
great job with this the flow was great this poem was beautiful good luck in th4e contest
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SO BEAUTIFUL AND SO TRUE.
Ah; so beautiful! it is indeed a joy to be back and to read the wonderful poems of my friends. This is so beautiful and the picture and the blue background is breathtaking. -
Thanks for commenting and pointing out a mispelled word used.
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Liked the flow and rhyme of these lines, and the photo with the poem. Not sure of "There's no reversing your lose once discovered" - wrong word in lose?
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