Time
I never wait for friend or foe,
and ever forward I will go.
Don't ever ask me to look back,
as I'm something so many lack.
© Jim T. Henriksen
September 23rd, 2005
Author notes
This poem started as an addline riddle, but was too easy, so I decided to make it into a regular poem instead... Melpomene won by the way, and if you haven't figured it out, look at the title again. 
Written September 23rd, 2005
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Hi, Sigrun! Thanks for the comment, and the applause, it means a lot to me.
Jim
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wow!
I really like this! Very clever and well-done. You get my applause, and now I'm off to see the bunny poem.... LOL.... -
Hi, elarnol. About the line that confused you, I tried to write this from the perspective of personified time. Orininally this was a riddle, but all too easy to solve, so I made it into a poem, removed "Who am I?", and renamed it to "Time" (which was the answer). Ofcourse I am not something so many lack. Thanks again for the comment! Jim
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This is a great poem. The title adds value to the poem's content. I was just a tad confused about the line that read: "as I'm something so many lack". How are you something so many lack? I feel that it would have been better for you to have described what people lack. Other than that, the poem is excellent.
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Thank you, Lady anairO, I am glad you like it.
Jim
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Beautiful riddle, very nicely penned... Well done!
Lady anairO
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Thanks, Linda, I appreciate your comment!
Seems you like it alot, since you YELL...
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NICE POEM,FORMED WELL AND darned I like it..Linda
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Thanks, Sharcu. I'm confused to wether you didn't get the riddle, or the fact that is was a riddle... Glad that you liked it, though, and I'm thrilled that you want to share it with your fiends. Just remeber to direct them to my AP-page. Just kidding!
Thanks for the applause!
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Thanks, alonewithyou. Unfortunately (or should I say fortunately) there is no such thing as a time machine, and what is done is done. Thanks for the applause!
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Self-inflating jackassery? LOL! Well, I guess that if time had a personality, it would be a self-inflated jackass. Thanks for the encouragement to write more riddles!
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The first time I read this, I was like WTF! Then I realized it was a riddle and got the answer to the riddle so then ya... very good riddle. I'll be sharing this with some of my friends. Keep up the great work!
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this is a very subtle yet intense description of the word time... i love it. "don't ask me to look back" is my favorite part.. because there is no time machine that will change our regrets and mistakes. nice write.
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hah. I first thought that this was self-inflating jackassery, but now that you say it is a "riddle" for time, it makes sense not to cringse. I'm sure I know someone who wouldn't get the ridle, you should do more. Riddles are spiffy.
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Thanks a million, Kitty! I guess we have the same perception of time. I appreciate your words and your applause. Jim
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This is amazing. I love the way you portray time in this piece. Just how i would have imagined it Keep up the fantastic work!!
One love,
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Hi there, AluraStar. You wouldn't have guessed it? Maybe I was just unlucky and got the right answer at once...
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Thanks, IamMEg. Yes, it was originally a riddle, but I got right answer at first attempt, so I made it into a poem instead. Thank you for the applause!
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Not exactly a riddle anymore, but it started as one. Decided to make it a regular poem instead...
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a riddle and the title "time" being the answer, huh? it's cute.
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Thanks Laura! Sometimes I wonder myself. Thanks for the applause!
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Very good indeed Hmmm...I wonder where the inspiration cameth
Hehe..
Thanks for sharing. La x
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hee,thank goodness you did turn it in to a poem,people like me would have never gotten the riddle.i am so bad at those things.
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Good description of time - simple and to the point. It flows well and rhyme scheme works. It reads like a nursery rhyme riddle - what am I?
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Thanks for the comment, Sugs! I guess it was more of a poem than a riddle to begin with.
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hey ! it was a good one,as the phrase goes,short n sweet,liked it
keep writing more,checked the add line too, nice decision of making it independent!
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How right you are, Darlee. I guess this poem says what time would say if it could speak.
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Thanks for the comment and the applause, captain splat! Your suggestion for the last line helped me realize the line could need a little change, but as I had to keep it in rythm, I shortened your suggestion by pulling "I am" into "I'm". Better now?
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very good
I really like this piece. It is brief, simply written and straight to the point. It gives a good message. If we have to look back, let it be on good things, not bad. We should make the most of the time we have and enjoy it. Darlee77 -
Thanks a million, Lencio! I truely appreciate your comments, no matter if they contains typos.
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Wonderful
Wow, that's really good, a moment of inspiration and a nice piece of work..Maybe it's me, but I would change the last line to 'as I am something so many lack'. -
Riddle no, it's too easy, poem beautiful!!! How thru that so many lack time in their lives, and it waits for no one. Well said in so few words, great message
Love and light,
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Thanks, NooNi! I will take a look at your poem, it's always a pleasure for me to meet other poets, and comment or critique on their work.
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very nice
i really liked it
short, nicely written and to the point
i fail to write short poems, i only wrote a short one a few days back but not thisshort lol
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"Time and tide waits for no man," it is said, and that saying is what inspired me to write this poem. True, sometimes we all could wish not to be able to look back. Thanks for the comment!
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Hi Jim! Thanks for the comment. I write short and long poems as the words come to me. Read a quote once, don't know who said it; "I write long letters, because I don't have the time to write them short." Sincerely, Jim.
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Well it is most certainly time
and don;t we all at times wish we had the
ability to not look back
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concise, but entertaining. I always find it morer difficult to write short, effective poems, as you have done here.
Write On!
jIM
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