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Who I am

I am a tree
Though sometimes I don't feel like it
Strength can escape me
But I'm still standing
Even if I'm leaning

I am the ocean
Even if I'm not at all like it
You can only see the surface
I'm deeper beneath
More than you can ever dream

I am the sky
When I feel like it
Always watching over you
Wherever you are
I'll be there with you

I am a mountain
Though I'm not as tall
Never changing who I am
Even if parts of me grow different
Or I start to fall

I am your earth
Though I don't have all you need
I revolve around you
Hanging on nothing
Just waiting for you

Author notes

I wrote this piece today and it is still a work in progress but I thought I'd see what other people think of it.

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Written September 23rd, 2005

A contest entry

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  • bananasfoster42
    April 29

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    this is really good! i see that you've entered this in one of my contests b4 !! i think i get it more now tho, i've learned in the past year to read more into the poetry i read, so i def get a deeper meaning of this poem. good luck again!

  • Tali28
    January 20, 2007

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    Thanks

    Thanks for your entry. I will be back when the contest ends to give you my thoughts. Best of luck to you in my contest.
    Tali

  • bananasfoster42
    January 19, 2007
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    this is nice! i especially like the second stanza. thanks for entering!
  • xscreamurx3outxx
    July 18, 2006
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    wow your work is excellent.
    keep it up = )
  • flowerfairies
    October 12, 2005
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    this is great and i take it as free verse? i love the descriptions in here to make us feel at one with nature lolxxxxxxx

  • MYownFreedom
    September 23, 2005
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    WOW... I LOVE this... i love your use of metaphors throughout this write...this made it a very powerful statement.. nice imagery created as well

    As a greeter here for all poetry I am here to welcome you I am so glad you have decided to join us and share your poetry with us here. The best way to receive comments on your work is to read and comment on other poets, and they will return the favor as well. If you have any questions... please feel free to ask, I will be glad to help. Enjoy your time here and remember.. read write and comment
    Amy
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