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Harmony Bound

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There are winds that hover over me
And waves that splash below.
They cannot steal my path from me,
I'm never letting go.

I've learned to balance on my fears
And how to make each move
Without forsaking what I've learned
And manage to improve.

I may be blind to what may come
But I'm watching where I go.
I own the steps I freely choose,
I'm never letting go.

So whistle on and splash real hard
I'm higher than your crown.
I'm living in the cirrus now
Where secrets' hopes are found.

I have a life that's all my own,
A song with my own flow.
It's rhyming through the clouds above
And I'm never letting go.




 

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was in the contest:  allpoetry.com/Contest/1527511
Written September 23rd, 2005

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  • Ellis gold member
    December 5, 2007
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    YOU are in Control, Dude


  • Kalima
    May 8, 2007
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    Damn! I love this one, And the pictures are just breath taking. Very brilliant. Stacey:


  • Mephitic ID Synergy gold member
    September 26, 2005
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    Hmm... Kind of reminds me of that part from the movie "The Explorers" where the kids are all flying through the clouds in a shared dream. There's definitely a sense of taking your freedom, of having earned it and taking your right. It's almost an existential, humanistic message. And the rhythm was very nice.

    Mike

  • -Lost Words-
    September 24, 2005
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    so great

    This ... RULEZ...

    so great... wow...
    I just love the rithm and the rhyme is great 2...



  • Claide
    September 24, 2005
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    Wow... Yes. This reminds me of my field . Also there's immediate sentimental value in the refrain but that's 'inside'.

    Very impressive... One of my favorites of yours.
    - Cor


  • Blind-Ambition
    September 23, 2005
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    love it

    This seems sort of redundant since I'm talking with you on AIM right now. But this is a gorgeous poem! I know you don't think it's very in-depth (im not using your "word") it still clearly illustrates your life's philosophy. Congratulations on winning.

    So whistle on and splash real hard
    I'm higher than your crown.
    I'm living in the cirrus now
    Where secrets' hopes are found.

  • honeybe
    September 23, 2005
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    awsome. loved it. never let go of anything that you don't want to. later Honeybe


  • masterblaster gold member
    September 23, 2005
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    Hi, liked this a lot, great feel and flow, made me smile, such determination, you should go far,lol, all the best in the comp, hugs Di


  • Lady Eclipse
    September 23, 2005
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    ooooh this was well written, great job, It had a good rhyming flow and an awesome feel. Good luck in the contest ~lots of Love~ Lady Eclipse

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