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Choked Words - Sonnet #32

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The wonder of the love she gives to me
Is something far beyond what I deserve,
For she, some way, has found the simple key
That opens all my doors, and does deserve

To have a life that's filled with joy and peace,
The things I cannot promise day to day.
And yet somehow I've felt her love increase,
Our time together like a roundelay.

But who am I to argue with this lass,
If she, today, agrees to be my wife?
And if that won'drous thing should come to pass,
This lad, at last, has meaning to his life.

And so I hold my breath and hold her hands,
My words are choked, and yet she understands.

Author notes

Second entry to the contest.
Written September 22nd, 2005

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  • Jackle silver member
    October 11, 2005
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    Beautiful to th love of his life.

    Love is the greatest and when it lasts-- it is wonderful.
    I really enjoed the poem. Did not notice the end date but you should win.

  • Bronwen Eckstein
    September 23, 2005
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    Perfect

    As always, I love your constrained and structured style, and your beautiful use of English. This poem so accurately describes the image, that I can't imagine any other way of doing it! (I haven't read the contest rules so I can't be sure). A perfect sonnet. I hope it wins.


  • SexyAngel0418
    September 22, 2005
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    <--- tears of sweetness... Aww!!! This poem is so sweet!!! I really hope that's what was going through Matt's mind as he proposed to me!!! Good luck in the contest!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth


  • B Chandler
    September 22, 2005
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    standing ovation

    Paul if i didnt know any better I'd say this felt more like a marriage proposal and that the memories are personal to when you proposed to your wife. i love the flow alot but got stomped with the deserve lines...oh well good luck in the contest
    Rae


  • Lucian Valcor
    September 22, 2005
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    this was very sweet I love these types of poems great job
    good luck in the contest kirby


  • Gatlianne
    September 22, 2005
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    oh! sooo sweet!


  • SuZyCuE
    September 22, 2005
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    What a beautiful sonnet. Love is such a wondeful thing when it is felt by both sides. I love your sonnets Paul, they are always so beautiful and uplifting

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