Summer stars
shoot through the sky
fading memories
Author notes
Written September 21st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- haiku by Bill Robertson.
300 points, ended October 1, 2005, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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excellent presentation
This is really beautiful Susan. Your words are very soft in this write just like those fading memories.
I love the picture you have used with the poem.
Ethereal Melody
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Shooting stars, what a beautiful theme. Yes, they are akin to fading memories, hurtling through the universe, burning, blazing away, then smouldering ... fading like those memories we fail to hold onto. So much here is captured in so few lines, it is immediately provocative of an urge to ponder!
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Hi a super haiku, great my friend, you have my applause, hugs Di
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Sis.. this is such a succinct yet vibrant haiku piece. I so love reading the unexpected forms from you. You are so great at mastering these styles.
I do miss you!! We need to catch up soon... very soon. Keep surprising us with such thoughts of vibrance shared.
luv you,
kimmie
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Dear Susan, What a magnificent haiku, you are such a darling lady with a beautiful heart.
Love you Joan
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Susan, What a fantastic image you have woven here. Very well done piece. The end of summer does seem to go out with a bang and always leaves me feeling slightly cheated and yet anticipating the fall season as well. Beautifully done my friend. Blessings and Hugs, Gypsy
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wow, this is so pretty....nice images, shooting stars are a rarity.....lovely picture you have painted....
much love,
~Chris~
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Susan, I read this before and thought I'd commented on it, but guess I didn't... so here I am
As you know, Haiku is one of my favorite forms of poetry, both to read and to write.
Yours here is absolutly beautiful, great visuals, and wonderful content.
Good luck in the contest, sis
Love and
Dee
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Susan, spectacular haiku. I think every thought in my head would vanish at the wonder of a sight like you have painted here. LOL I love you. Sis
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An None As Bright As She.....! BEAUTIFUL
How Ya Doin, Again Youre Always In My Thoughts Girly
Take Care And Your Writes Are Very Inspiring As Is Your Strength!
xoxoxo Angel oxoxox
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I thought I had left a comment on this one, of course I had visited this page some days ago, sometimes it's the system that goes wrong, sometimes the time at the office, sometimes the mind just goes off lol!!!
This is a breathtaking one, yes, we have shared the same concept here, only you have done it more wonderfully!!! May this win my friend.
Love and light,
Lencio -
Lovely ku sis..
What a shame...an asteroid flies millions of miles across space and ends up breaking up and burning up in our atmosphere for our enjoyment. It almost doesn't seem fair does it...
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Just wow, I read this several times. I had fading memories simultanously. I usually don't get this much from a Ku, but this is brilliant.
Peace Muddy -
awesome!
This is truly inspiring Susan, I love how you have alluded to shooting stars as fading memories! that is an excellent way of getting your idea across, you never fail to amaze me with the wonderful work you produce.
Well Done!
~Katie~
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10x for the messages lol
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That is really cool!! You have an amazing gift!
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Beautiful... The pic is wonderful. Great job on this!
Ashley
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Excellent
Excellent write..Written so well...So little words an yet so much said ..I really love this.. Good luck in the contest...I really hope you win..You, deserve to.
Blessings,
Betty -
oh how neat. Shooting stars do sort of make you think of fading memories don't they? Well...at least they do NOW. This is wonderful. I watched "Smallville" tonight and it was the night the meteor hit..your picture was kind of shocking after watching that on TV tonight and fits this piece very very well. You did a wonderful job on this.
~Lyrical
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Very nice, reminds me of the song "Lakeside Park" by Rush:
Lakeside Park
Willows in the breeze
Lakeside Park
So many memories
Laughing rides
Midway lights
Shining stars on summer nights
This really hits home because Lakeside Park is in my hometown and your poem fits it like a glove. Thanks for sharing!
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Perfect words for a perfect background. Very cool
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Nicely done. Good metaphor.
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Beautiful haiku and the art fits it so well Good luck in this contest I enjoyed being able to read this one.
Melonie -
Oh Susan , maybe I am sort of glad that summer will eventually be only a memory. I did not catch too many stars it seems , and neither did you However there is Hope and Faith , there is Love and Friendship , and there are people like you
much love,
Reenie
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I think I saw a shooting star when I was a kid..otherwise, no luck (clouds in the way, etc.) Love this, Sis!
zzz
♥ Maureen
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Ummmm Eight words say so very much. I have had many ocassions to see shoorting stars. They are magnificant, as is your haiku. I love haikus and you have made me adore them even more with this. Beautiful with brilliant embers of light.
Much Love,
Renee
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I really like this poem Susan, but it appears you didn't follow the rules...I haven't actually been to the contest, but the 2 line brief shows that it has to be in the 5-7-5 format...
I really like it though, so I personally wouldn't change it, or just change it temporarily so you can win the contest, and then change it back
Anyway, as usual, I love the picture too. Good Job Susan...I'm afraid I haven't been a very good friend to you lately, and I apologize. I hope you're doing well
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Nicely done Susan lovely read even
leaving memories would work also.
Best wishes in the contest. Sherry
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do you know, that i have never seen a shooting star sis!?!
wonder what that means
either i've lousy luck
or i spend too much time indoors!
you are the contest queen of late
don't know where you get the inspiration
nor the energy
but, that's my sis
super susan!
lots of love to you,
~liz -
I think we are in tune, both in celstrial moods it seems! Well the graphic is really stunning!!!But, not as stunning as your words....really gives one something to think about...which is exactly what a haiku is made for! Terrific write & great luck to you in the contest!!
for you! --Karen
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i agree- shooting to shoot will make this absolutely perfect- the picture is a great compliment to the haiku too.
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Thanks so much
Born4freedom and Nice to see you here Sag long time
I changed it and thanks for taking time to stop by
Much appreciated
Hugs
Susan~~~
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I agree with B4F. Change it to "shoot" though ... I think. A winner Blushy.
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