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Weep My Girl



She gasps for air

stolen

from her lungs


Sobs echoing in her
hollow bones.


she weeps, she weeps


Her heart barely beating

She falls silent

But

Screams still escape from under the door.


she weeps, she weeps


She wishes she could bleed

Again

Red river so sweet

But that roads been taken and

the scars are faded.


she weeps, oh how she weeps


Her reflection stares at her

Through a broken mirror

Brown eyes so sweet

Now so weak


She lays defeated

Crumpled

to the floor


....


she weeps no more, she weeps no more

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Written September 21st, 2005

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  • LeftBehindBebe
    June 28, 2007
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    Wow. I really loved your poem. Nice writing..like always. =]


  • TheClosestThing
    December 31, 2006

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    "Red river so sweet

    But that roads been taken and

    the scars are faded.


    she weeps, oh how she weeps"

    ^love that!


  • Glamorous
    September 21, 2005
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    wow Mercy that is AWESOME i...*speechless*

    <333


  • Autumn Raine
    September 21, 2005
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    thanks yous bubbahs!!! muah!!!


  • Tetsuka
    September 21, 2005
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    ;_; awww babeums!!!! *hugglefies*


  • Autumn Raine
    September 21, 2005
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    wow i havent even picked the background and youve already commented thanks. dont worry this isnt true.. just something i was feeling at the moment


  • Bosshogg86
    September 21, 2005
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    To know her pain would have been worth it, i could have probably helped her,anyway shape or form.

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