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Mystic Island Lady

In crystal clear moonlit splendor,
rippled waves caress the sea shore.
Soft winds create a surrender,
an island's paradise I long for.

Cares, worries long since forgotten,
drift away as clouds roll by.
Misty clouds float like white cotton,
horizon's kiss of starlit sky.

Trade winds whisper softly to me,
carried across steep mountain's crest.
Sings a song of island's beauty,
softer and sweeter than the rest.

Mystic Island, lady of wonder.
Secrets hushed in mango groves.
How many lover's hearts were plundered,
'neath your azure waves on sands of gold.


               ~~~Suseann~~










 

Author notes

I'm not too whippy at exact meter,so my buddy Lyrical Soul helped me design the finished write.Thank you Robin.It is perfecto! now.
Written September 20th, 2005

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  • suseann
    September 21, 2005
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    Oh ,my heart's broken for sure. Yes you have commented most nicely to others of mine.Guess they weren't too memorable.And thank you for the curtiously IM'ing your positive suggestions.I've changed it somewhat.But the (person)-(subject),I'm refering to in the poem is the island named Mystic Lady.And the plundered heart could be male or female.Basicly,it's me strolling the beach of Mystic Lady talking to her as a person.Thank you for your help.~~Suseann
    Edited on Sep 21, 1:23 p.m. because ''.


  • wbiro gold member
    September 21, 2005
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    hello, suseann! I believe this could be the first poem I ever commented on of yours, and after all the nice comments you've left me since I've been here... kick me! OK, let me begin reading...

    'Mystic Island Lady', now why, I ask myself, would suseann be writing about a mystic island lady, is it one of her fantasies? IS SHE ONE?!!! Is it just a fine yarn she will spin that has no relation to her life... let's see... ahhh, something she longs for! I hope she brings a mystic man... lol OK, into the first stanza... very poetic choice of words, suseann, and artfully done... and the foundation of the poem's meaning is set forth... oh, a plunderer of hearts seeking respite! Well, suseann, I'm sure you are not to blame, love being so uncontrollable! Thank you for the journey, it was a pleasant and entertaining one!


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 20, 2005
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    '...Cares, worries long since forgotten,
    drift away on clouds rolling by.
    Misty clouds float like white cotton,
    horizons kiss of starlit sky.


    Trade winds whisper softly to me,
    carried across steep mountain's crest.
    Sings a song of island beauty,
    softer and sweeter than the rest...'

    Gorgeous penning, suse!!! Lovely picture, too...ya did good, my Friend... Wander


  • suseann
    September 20, 2005
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    Then it did as I intended it to.And thank you for commenting,glad to here you enjoyed the peaceful feelings.
    Edited on Sep 22, 12:54 because 'SPELLING ERROR'.

  • amateurpoetess
    September 20, 2005
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    This would have worked just as well without the picture you've added. An amazing write. I could see, smell and taste the shore and feel the mood. Excellent.


  • Valley of Echoes
    September 20, 2005
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    This was beautiful and took me to a place in my mind that I havent dared ventured into for a long while. It reminded me of having the small moment of peace of mind, a utopian dream. Great write.

    VOE


  • Lionheart
    September 20, 2005
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    wonderful write

    You didnt even need the picture as your words created the image in my mind very well. This is beautiful! Love it. Thanks for sharing this.


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    September 20, 2005
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    Awwwe, shucks suseann....you did all the work. I just tweaked a tad. Love and hugs lady!


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    September 20, 2005
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    OH, I looooooooooooove that picture suseann and mixed with your imaginative words, this creates a tropical paradice I can only hope to see one day. So well done lady!!

    ~Lyrical

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