As I sit here tonight, I want to cut
I see you sleeping so beautifully
I just want to see blood,
thats all.
I reach for my blade
and walk to your gorgeous body
I slowly slide my blade across your wrist
Bleed for me baby,
Bleed for me.
I slide my blade across your thigh,
and watch the blood drip
Bleed for me baby,
Bleed for me.
The sight of your blood is so beautiful
As I lick it off your wrist
MMM, So thick and rich
I dont love you anymore baby,
I slide my blade across your throat
I sit in the chair
Next to your king sized bed
Watch you bleeding beautifully.
I slide my blade across my own throat
here's to you baby,
Now I bleed for you!
Author notes
Flowing Red Embers
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A contest entry
- Only 4 EMOS!~those of you who cut heres your chance by Frozen Tranquility.
341 points, ended February 11, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sad Dark Depressing...... by Ntagatf.
400 points, ended February 23, 2007, 103 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love is the slowest form of suicide... by Yours-To-Have.
500 points, ended March 22, 2007, 79 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - dark prewrites only!!! by Gasp.
660 points, ended February 15, 2007, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ♥ Do You Bleed Glitter? ♥ by Dead Star--x.
450 points, ended March 22, 2007, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i likethis-deffinitly dark and gorey (im not a fan of gore) but i liked this anyway-the title catches your attention and reels you in. thanx for entering & good luck!
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it's a great poem, but not exactly what i am looking for, it's a little too short, and i wanted it to be long and twisting, your's was short and to the point, it' good though loved reading it.
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omg that gave me shivers!!! great poem and great ending
thx for entering my contest
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This is very...interesting. It is a good poem, don't get me wrong. But the feel of it scares me more than makes me cry. I liked the last line though. Good luck!
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wow creepy but wow are you vamp i don't know many people like me that like blood that much!!! thats so cool i love this its so beautifully written! great job! Thank you for entering my contest and i wanna wish you the best of luck! keep up the good work!
~tearstaindangel~
PS you need to place your option# in the authors notes or you will be disqualified and i dont want to do that so please go back and fix it before my contest ends! -
intresting poem abit wierd but then when you enter this contest i exspect to see weird! was there alot of thourght into this poem? or did it just come natrually?
'here's to you baby,
Now I bleed for you!'
powerful lines there really make the poem up well done ace job! good luck in the contest -
Hmm... An interstingly disturbing piece of writing... but very well written... Well done
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ha.. somehow strange to me, i laughed at the end. so weird. so dark, yet i found the humor to it all. inflicting the pain on him, who caused you so much pain. showing him at the end, hes no longer in contol of your hurt. youre the master of your own fate. thats how it should be. great job
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awwww.. thats so sad....its so beautiful though.. great write
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Excellent
I like this, you did a great job, it is dark but beautiful. I hope that you will continue writing and have a wonderful day! -
Such a powerful poem...wow. I can feel not only you wanting revenge, but it seems like there's misery in it too, because of the last three lines. It's such a twist ending, and this is an amazing thought that you put into words. Thank you very much for entering my contest. I love this. Good luck!
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This is really good.I like it a lot.Good luck.
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I forgot to write that I chose to write about the title BLEED FOR ME, So i am doing it here!
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