change of season…a haiku
summer sunlight fades
autumn paints her golden hues
soon the leaves will fall
dee garner
september 20, 2005
Author notes
Written September 20th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- 5, 7, 5, Haikus !!!!YAY!!!! by Autumn Whisper.
325 points, ended September 30, 2005, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Nice haiku about the change of season.
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beautiful
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Very good haiku. It's beautiful!
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Very creative. Very beautiful haiku!
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A wonderful read. Rather than wait for the leaves to start falling I think I will go to the park with my daughter.
Sweet poem.
John -
Beautiful haiku
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an excellent haiku, its a wonder why this piece did not win anything!! You followed the pattern pefectly and it flowed very well!! It's good to see people who can write good haikus. I have a haiku up called Silent Communication, you should take a peak if you can. Again excellent write you've captured so much with so few words!!!
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Thank you for such an inspiring comment, cafegroundzero
I love writing haiku and autumn is my favorite season, so this was sort of a natural for me.
Thanks also for your suggestions, much appreciated
The website you mentioned sounds interesting... I'll be sure to make a visit
Dee
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This bears some looking into
Pleasant image, Dee.
I must add, gently, if possible, "golden hues" might be well used. Maybe I'm wrong. I would like to refer you to Donald Hall's THEIR ANCIENT GLITTERING EYES.
Last night I was reading the chapters on Ezra Pound and Mariane Moore. There are some very good paragraphs on the struggle to create poetry, to avoid derivative, etc. I felt humbled, myself. But oh well.
There is a group of people at the 43things.com community who have made it a goal to write haiku on Fridays. Why Fridays? I don't know. I've joined them.
Lovely photo above, you have. I should look so photogenic, God willing. -
I adored this! I love haikus, but I feel there isn't enough sylables to fi words into, but you got it perfect, and the words you used were brilliant. I loved it. Well done
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Beautiful, beautiful poem catz, so tranquil and peaceful, relaxing! And such wonderful words you have used, a big well done to you
best wishes as always
~Moonstone Virgo~
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I can see the painting.
Lovely imagery in so few words.
~Mary O
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great write
Beautiful haiku. Your talent shines again -
Yes, Fall is here and the beauty of the Earth beginning to anticipate its slumber... Your haiku tells much of the season. A true haiku in the traditional sense. 5-7-5 Perfect! very lovely Dee! The very vest to you in this challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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This is lovely. You have captured the seasonal change beautifully. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
LIZ -
Tis the season. I see the trees across my yard and street already changing...Seems it happens quicker every year. A well done haiku. Best in the contest.
Sam
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excellent!
Wonderfully done!!!!
Such is the vision of fall!!! -
leaves twirling down
the call of their last hurrah
ground waits, to welcome
Hugs...Eddy -
This is beautiful, Dee. I could visualize this perfectly-as summer comes to her end and hands the baton over to autumn. Well done!!!
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This is a very well crafted Haiku and I love how the word "fall" has a double meaning. Clever writing and very much enjoyed. Good luck in the contest.
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excellent
Very well done!!!
This is beautiful representation of the fall season.
This poem is written in perfect form the picture you pen is very nice.
Good luck in the contest!!
BRAVO!!!!!
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Awww this is my favorite time of year so I love this haiku. very nice.
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Oh Dee, I loved this lovely haiku please write
more of them because this was just to beautiful.
Enjoyed this one excellent. Hugs,Sherry
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sweet poem catz, its very good,
best of luck in the contest
best wishes
Shimmering River
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