Tortured by the things I thought I had.
How did I ever let My life get this bad?
You twist me in ways I thought I'd never bend.
And yet my love for you will never end.
Why is it I always feel like the bad guy?
When it was you who burned down my sky.
Even when your crawling at my feet.
This victory tastes too much like defeat.
You use me.
You break me.
You throw me away
I don't know what to say.
I don't understand this game you play.
If you love me why do you hurt me?
How can such a broken love be?
You use me.
You break me.
You throw me away
I take you back again and again.
Wondering when your new treachery will begin.
But I shove these thoughts into the back of my mind.
My love for you will always make me blind.
Maybe you'll learn from the mistakes of the past.
Maybe this time our relation ship will last.
Or maybe I'll learn to live without you.
To finally allow my heart to heal and begin anew.
You use me.
You break me.
You throw me away.
I don't know what to think.
You break my heart the second I blink.
If you really love me why do you scorn me.
How can such a lonely love be.
You use me.
You break me.
You throw me away.
You are my snake in the grass.
You are my feet upon broken glass.
You are my disease and my blight.
You are my despair and my fright.
You feed deeply upon my life.
You bring me nothing but pain and strife.
You feed only betrayel and lies.
You hide your truths from my eyes.
You use me.
You break me.
You Throw me away.
You thow my love away.
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I have impressed myself with this one
Written September 20th, 2005
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No No No,SORRY SORRY SORRY,i love you tho,u know that,this is very good and im sorry that i havnt gotten to read your stuff till now,ive missed so much
you are so awsome and i love you
and im soooooooooo proud of you!
Dove
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an excellent poem
sad and heartfelt
an excellent flow and the use of simple words to express how you feel
i really liked this poem and enjoyed reading it
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wow I'm surprised I didn't see this until now... this is awesome hun... really sad though, I hope you're doing alright.
It's depressing when people that you love hurt you and leave you to the feeling that you want to die, that you want it to end and you know that it's their fault that you feel that way.
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Definetely a subject I can relate to anymore. Well done, the wording and strictly maintained rhyme scheme were what I felt to be the best aspects of this write, as well as the well timed rhythm you gave it.
Very deep and revealing as well, not hiding anything you're feeling, just putting it all out on the table for us to read. Well done, good job on this. -
Wonderful write
I really liked this poem. Mostly because a lot of people are afraid to put their true feelings out there about something, afraid of who might read it. You really did a good job of putting your feelings down without making it overbearing for someone to read. Just one thing that got to me though: in the 2nd line of the 5th stanze relation ship should be relationship with no space in between. Just wanted to let you know. Great write, keep it up! :') -
i love the poem **
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wow you must really hate this person.
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this poem reflects so much disloyalty,anger and at the same time trust your heart to take him back again.. what a precious and loving heart,and yet broken time after time..great write
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wow this poem was excellent
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really good
I love how the emotion in this poem takes over the senses and lets the reader know what you felt. I reaally liked this poem and the repitition makes it flow really well. -
this was really beautiful
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This is a wonderful job of writing. I have learned that some people are masters at laying the blame at other people's feet. They say so and so made me do it. So and so made me feel this way. So and so made me say those things. They take no responsibility for their own actions and refuse to accept the fact that they are in charge of themselves. I really like this a lot because I can personify it so well. Great job!
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Excellent
Whoa very well done poem. Awesome writing. I especially loved this part :
I take you back again and again.
Wondering when your new treachery will begin.
But I shove these thoughts into the back of my mind.
My love for you will always make me blind.
Love is Blind. So they say. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. I really loved it. Keep on writing
Peace
*Lust*
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I'm impressed too.. This would make a great song, and would probably be a big hit because I think a lot of us can relate to this, unfortunately. My only nitpicky thing is in the eighth stanza and the line "You feed only betrayel and lies.", it would be "betrayal". Just a little spelling error. Excellent writing
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This is really good, really. The rhyming is great, as is the rhythm and I love the simple description in it.
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wow
i really like this
your great
i like the bakround to!
it goes with
the poem!
great job!
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I always wonder if men hurt. This shows that I guess you do. But still I'm left wondering because the pain in my heart won't let it go through; I'm so busy going; "yeah right." But it was a good write .. hope your heart mends .. before or after mine; what's the dif ...
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This is quite well written...you convey your emotions well...one line that I like is, "This victory tastes too much like defeat"...clever and well worded...good job, and keep it up...
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This shows the betrayal and the repetitive breaking of your heart by the repeated verses. I love how it sounded slightly frustrated and vulnerable but with an underlying backbone. It was penned wonderfully. Great job.
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Good write, i like rhyme, it always sells me, on the last line i think you meant 'throw', figured i'd point that out, nice write, always keep writing
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Terrific sad and painful read but really good write .Well done
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Hi, gOod write, if I was you I would give him a kick where it hurts most he sounds terrible, trouble with us girls when we are in love we are so stupid,lol,all the best my friend hope it works out for you, hugs Di
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This was awesome Sean! Glad your back. Man I can so relate to this. ~~Shannon~~
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you have impressed me too! i think this has to be one of the best ive ever read - tragically beautiful! (can i say that?) its good but sad but really damn good!!!!!
Nell
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