Moving to Canada
Take me to the depths of your apartment
The colours have enriched me
Old age Old age O age for us to be together
Such a secretive lust
That connects us at the hip
Separates us by the wayward links
Flag me over in Canada
Make me a learned lover
A mile for a penny for a dollar For anything that you must
Take me to your god
And let me pray for your saving sense
Everyday I will remember the words I pretend that you promise me
The words that dart inside That you do not know That you cannot ever know
This nation reminds me of your green sweater
Such a dream to wrap it upon me
Seize the days
Into old age Into old age Never to repeat Only to eat Sleep Dream
Dream of those quench stemmed days
O the day The hour The minute The century
The beats
Way in which I have waited and whispered
I want to be your straight and narrow
Curl you up in the sheet of a sun
Darken no room that you enter into
Old age Death never uttered between us
A figment of this lad's imagination
A danger zone until we reach it in our ceremony
Destination
You are stalling
Invite me I call I come
The green petals assume my measures
Author notes
Something that I thought you would enjoy Daniela as I know we have spoken of this many times. I thought I would put in my experience. A tiny experience. This person does not even know I exist. I think and only think. Tony.
and i'm going to move to canada
and we're going to die of old age
- To The Teeth
Righteous Babes
Oh the lacking of punctuation is on purpose. The repetitive qualities are something I have played with. Tony.
Written September 20th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Ani DiFranco Lyrics Contest by Daniela Violin.
450 points, ended September 29, 2005, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you. This is a great comment. Nice to hear from you. TOny.
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amazing.... this poem makes me want to go listen to that song.... so i will!
i think what you did with the 'old age' part really really works in this poem.
i also love how you started new lines on the same line, and the lack of punctuation. it really fits with the mood. -
Wow! Thank you very much Daniela. This was a great piece for me to dish some things that I needed to as well as playing with form and idea. Tony.
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Wow, now this is amazing... I was wondering what people would do with that quote, and you did Ani proud with this. Great job!
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Thank you very much. Yes this was an immediate write. Punctuation is rarely used for me and when it is used it must have a direct purpose or else there is not a great point to it for me. A lot of my writing bleeds into the next line or word. Lovely to hear from such a generous writer and reader. Tony.
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I love your use of structure to convey your feelings. The randomization is interesting. I love how you chose not to limit yourself with any punctuation. Normally I cringe when I see writers misusing or NOT using punctuation in their works, but this is a wonderful piece that is much stronger without it.
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