At dawn-
The thunder of fire will roar,
the earth will smoke with destruction.
Chaos will reign.
At dawn, my soul will be resting elsewhere in pure bliss-
Where will your soul be?
Author notes
superl337sauce
religious issue
hw
Written September 19th, 2005
See also:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/1567177
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too short for my contest... sorry.
disqualified. -
Judged-ola!
in heaven hopefully.... lolz
great job, i really really like this! -
Oh oh I do I do! It will be lounging on the couch watching Scooby Doo
But seriously, this was very deep
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I believe, you could make this poem more effective by switching your metaphors, instead of dawn try a season corresponding to the thunderous 'apacalypse.'
Poets since Medievil ages and before have used spring as birth, summer as adulthood, fall(mid-life), winter(old age)
This would require a possible rewrite but if may be rewarding later.
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Ur a real good poet, the last line sounds like a the catch phrase to something but it is still realy good at the end of the poem too
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