She has a hunger
No amount of food can fill
She just wants to be loved
Is that so much to ask?
She's starving to death
But no one can tell
She eats everythings
She's trying to fill the void
But its not working
Nothing can replace love
The more she eats
The e m p t i e r she becomes
She's a starved fat girl
Starved of love
Author notes
A work in progress..............
Written September 19th, 2005
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GREAT WRITE
THIS WAS A TERRIFIC PIECE -
Excellent idea for a poem. It's nice to see someone addressing something like this. People are so quick to judge others, especially when it comes to weight, and they never seem to look past the surface. This poem brings what is real to the reader's attention, not just what you can see from the outside.
I like the lines "the more she eats/the emptier she becomes." That has so much truth to it for a lot of people- it's said in a way that is both simple and descriptive.
Good job, and it's great that you wrote something that will mean so much to so many people.
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wow!this is really enjoyable...i love the form and diction!!i'm still giggling in here!!i really enjoyed the way you make love seem like an unquenchable thirst of some sort.this is quite outstanding if you ask me!!great write!this is really good!!!!lovely stuff.keep writing....ooops,i've run out of complements...but just for the record,this is great stuff!!!i really mean each word i've typed....good job!!!
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Good job. It's not often I read something on this subject and it is something that needs to be addressed more. I really liked the image of a "starving fat girl." But, I guess that could work several ways, starving because she's always hungry and starving for acceptance. I think if you expand on this poem a little, it will be fantastic. Keep it up.
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fantastic
omg this is AMAZING omg i'm serious i REALLY loved how you put this!! I never understood how i could put something like that and it HIT THE SPOT!! omg i know excactly how you feel. It kindaa makes me sad reading this because it's so yet yet true for me. BUt hey being sad is apart of life. Newyas thank you for writing this poem you really made my day. Althoug it was short it REALLY sent a message across..I loved it! Dude awesome piece. I just wrote one about how i really like this guy but can't have him called the unreachable love you might ike it..well great write -
This is a very interesting poem. I enjoyed it very much and it's uniqueness. I really dug the style too. I look forward to read more of your work. Keep on writing!
-Lindsay -
I understand the wanting, the constant need to consume. It may be human nature, or it may be society. The problem is the fact that that nagging urge exists at all.
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WOW I WAS ONCE THAT GIRL!!!!!!! but sadly im not dead dammit! good write keep it up!
Nikki (ThedarknessIFeel) -
This is good. Not very respectful but poetry doesn't have to be. good job
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Hey now that's interesting. That's how I feel in my heart. It's hard when all we want is to be loved and we can't even get that. Good job and keep it up
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Nice, an interesting topic. This poem could also represent more, like how too much of anything, love, a feeling, maybe drugs, can make us only want more. It can leave us starving when we've had too much. =) Keep up the good work.
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