Today I saw
a skyful of angels on the road near my house
slaughtered by the inhumanity
of never hearing prayers anymore.
We are selfish and alone
because the distance between
us and God is muffled and we are blind.
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For the times we all lose touch. Sometimes it hurts.
And not just us.
Written September 19th, 2005
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fluffy...
no one has ever said about my work, lmao!!!!
THANKS!
♥ Jenn -
I love reading poetry that refers to God in a positive light.
The imagery is so beautiful, and the poem is just light, simple, and.....fluffy. 
I don't know, it's the kind of poem you walk away from and you just smile.
See--->
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No probs, I just like good poetry.
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Thank you!! for your read, comment, and wonderfully kind words. means a lot to me
♥ Jenn -
I liked how you used the angels image, adjectiving with skyful and placing the in the distinctly ordinary context of a road.
Also liked how you lingered on the qauint image then when into the violence of having them slaughterd.
Finally liked how you blended the senses in your final line.
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Haha, I don't mind debates. I learn, they learn, and one of us wins thru annoying persistance, lol. Anyhoo, thanks for your comment. I agree muchlies
♥ Jen -
First off I love your poem, its a beautifully sad image, and as always you did a womderful job. The second thing is that Im not going to get too involved in this religous debate that these poems always seem to generate because different people can read the same verse and see it differently, alas 8 thousand different religons. But the more you study your bible, and not just what the preachers say but reading it cover to cover and pondering what you read, I think youll see that if you approach God with a truely repentant heart youll come to know that his heart will be opened to you, not that it was ever closed, if this wasnt the case then all the traits that make up Gods personality would be false. You see the thing is, once people make the realization that they are living a life of sin, they should be trying to make changes, and I dont believe that as long as make it to church on Sunday all is forgiven, the Bible describes that having faith in God and following his guidelines is like a "wrestling", its not going to be easy. With all that said I agree with you that the masses just dont have time for their creator, and thats pretty scarey considering the basis this country was founded on.
Joe -
Thank you!!! I couldn't agree more. Sometimes people tend to shove a mouthful of too much opinion in our throats and forget what the point of the poem was.
Yeah, I do have a religious bent. I go to a Christian school, even at one time considered myself a Christian, but due to life and mistakes I am wonderwing what I have just taken for granted.
Anyhoo. I am going to read your Jesus Christ poem again. I found nothing wrong with it at all. But people are so weird sometimes.
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BOO-YA
Ha. I did not realize you had a religious bent to you. Fantastic. I adore the visual here- slaughtered angels...and perhaps everyone just walking by ho-hum because no one cares anymore. Very devastating.
I see you have a bit of a ... argument of sorts between you and people on here. Don't worry, I went there with my poem 'Jesus Christ' and people got all confused and past the point.
The point is that no one is listening. Who knows if angels listen, and...why not? I like to put myself in everyone's shoes and I bet I would be an eavesdropping angel if i could get away with it haha.
But if you had written that Jesus was lying dead by the side of the road everyone would be screaming BLASPHEMY! so you really can't win either way.
Your poem is strong and wonderful and don't let anyone tell you otherwise
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"The bible gives them different jobs and carrying our prayers to Him isn't one of them. and He didn't say we should pray to them.. He said to pray in the name of His son.. I guess angels might eaves drop if they want more trouble..."
The whole thing doesn't make sense.
The Bible gives them jobs?
And when did I say we pray to angels?
And trouble...God gives angels trouble? And doesn't it say in the Bible angels are messengers of God?
So you think the world doesn't affect angels in any way? I never said they 'carry' our prayers to God. But nor do they turn an unhearing ear either. -
The bible gives them different jobs and carrying our prayers to Him isn't one of them. and He didn't say we should pray to them.. He said to pray in the name of His son.. I guess angels might eaves drop if they want more trouble...
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Yes God hears our prayers...but wy wouldn't angels? If they look out for us as well as the Holy Spirit, does that mean they're deaf or something?
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this can't really be about angels.. they don't hear prayer do they? Doesn't God hear our prayer through His Son ..? That's what the bible teaches ..
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Thanks. Truly is a vicious cycle even believers fall into. I know that for myself. Yoday we say there isn't a gap between us and God but the fact is right in front of us. We forget our God until we are chest deep in mud. It's stupid and insincere.
Thanks again, dear Andu!
♥ Jen -
This poem hits home straight away, and does not paint a pretty picture either. I really liked the depth you put in these few words though. You speak of a truth so fundamental to today's world that even those who claim to be believers can fall into this vicious cycle at times I guess. Anyhow, very well said and wonderfully scripted.
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Thanks much darling
♥ Jen -
When I was reading the Bible the other day, and it always seems to say that God with forget and turn His back on us when we are disobedient. And it just made me wonder how long it takes God to stop waiting for us to come back to Him after our continual rampage of sin. It scares me because I know I am not His pride and joy most of the time. I just wonder when the time will be when He gives up on me.
Thanks for the read and comment anyway Blaze
♥ Jen -
i love the way you see humanity
you described it perfectly in your poem
great job
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oh we are not separated from the creator at all maybe a small problem in listening with our hearts but being made of the craetor we are never separate from the vast energtic creator of unconditional love well done poet!!!
love and light
blaze -
haha, thanks!!
♥ Jenn -
deep
deep, but very terse! me likey so so so so much! you are so cool! keep up the great work. this was a fantastic poem you've written!
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heehee, when you mentioned snow then I thought of snow too for this poem. Yup, not snow angels doll, but real ones. But it seems prettier with snow doesn't it?
THANKS!
♥ Jen -
oo this is so purty! made me think of snow for some reason anywaysss, this is true stuff, and very very well written, so dang purdy
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Thanks for reading darling
♥ Jen -
So true. So well put. Kudos to you on this profound little piece. xoxo jen
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