The Supplication Of February, And May
In February
Buried in supplication
I inspected you
Tiny toes, on tiny feet
One through five, twice over
Two arms, two legs, anatomically correct
Tiny fingers on tiny hands
Thumb through pinkie, twice over
The small patch of dark hair
Tufted as a baby goose
And the smell,
So new, so fresh
But your eyes held a blank stare
And I could not see your forever in them
As I baptized your pallid face in salt
In February we met
and parted, and
I lost my God
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In May
Buried in supplication
I inspected you
Tiny toes on tiny feet
One through five, twice over
Two arms, two legs, anatomically correct
Tiny fingers on tiny hands
Thumb through pinkie, twice over
The wild patch of dark curls
Like infantile waves lapping the shore; your brow
And that smell…
Baby powder and kisses
New
And in your eyes
I got lost in forever, and ever, and ever…
As I baptized your crying face
in a salty love; joy
In May we met
you stayed
I found some faith
Author notes
Not sure what spurred this write. I lost a baby boy a little over fifteen years ago, and delivered a son a little over seven years ago. Some say the lord giveth, and he taketh away. Someone else told me that sometimes he gives back what he took. All I can say on that is that both sets of tears stung terribly.
Written September 18th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
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Oooh this is such a beautiful poem too, I am honoured to have such wonderful poets favouriting me! Absolutely fantastic, beautifully challenging to the brain. Great imagery!
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bravo
This poem is incredibly moving, touching...both sad and joyous--two sons, indeed! very deftly crafted ...bravo... bravo ...bravo
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This poem is very dear to my heart. Thank you for the wonderful comment. If you would like, read a poem of mine called Fight. It will give better insight on that second son. The first one, sadly, is not here. But is always in my heart. Thanks again my friend.
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Thank you for the kiind and caring words. They are appreciated.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Oh this is so sweet. Im sorry to hear you lost your little boy. But this is a very good and emotional write. Keep up the great work. Steph
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Thank you for such a kind comment. It is very appreciated.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
brillant my friend very well penned like this alot well done
good luck in the contest and thanks for entering
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Criss,
Thank you for such a heartfelt and lovely comment. Both sons were a blessing either way. Thanks again.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
This is beautiful Billie Jean. Each child was a blessing, one taught you loss and the other, brought you happiness.
Both are yours forever, one resides in your home and the other, in the arms of your God.
Beatifully and creative, though, I would not expect less from you. You write from your heart, and this, is a token of truth, we all understand on some level or another.
Be Blessed,
Criss
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Thank you for the sweet comment. That line broke my heart to write, but healed it some as well. Thank you again.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Beautiful. The line And I could not see your forever in them - broke my heart.
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Thank you so much hun. I do appreciate the sweet comment. Sorry for the tears, glad you enjoyed it.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
I have tears...real ones...and that is something I don't do often anymore. This is one of those write that I think could jolt emotion from stone, if a stone happened to read. Beautiful write. Best wishes and
s... ~genielassie~
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My friend,
I must say that in my two instances the fathers were uncaring to say the least. I do know however that a man feels this pain as deep. It was part of him as well. The anticipation of a child, of your bit of immortality, is a great thing. To have it snatched cruelly away is a terrible pain. Thank you for the applause. Thank you for reading, and thank you for relating. Again I say that you are a special kind of person. Thanks so much.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
I know well this loss, Lady. Still it stings, though I never show it to anyone. I think I never shall. Not one tear shed, but on the inside. That is worse, I think.
Worse still is the memory...
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Thank you so much for this wonderful comment. Blessings your way.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Sorry for the tears, greatful for the comment.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
M,
Thank you for such kindness in your words.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you so much for this kind comment. I do appreciate the kind words and feedback.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you so much for the great critique and comment. May your day hold magick.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you so much for this kind comment. I do so appreciate it.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
This is a beautiful piece filled with emotion. Being a mother myself I was definitly touched and found this very moving. Wonderful work, keep it up.
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Oh, I just adore the final lines of each section! "I lost my God... I found some faith." Beautiful, beautiful sentiments.
It is very nicely put together as well, kind of soft and slow-moving. Brought tears to my eyes and all.
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this is a particularly stunning write- I am in awe of the beauty of it- the depth of the pain- the limitless love- Beautiful.
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WOW i luv this poem a lot, cant wait to read more of yours!
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this is really a very beautiful write and a true sense of love emerged through the words. very powerful throughout, and it covered very nearly all of the five senses bringing the reader along! great poem!
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good
Really nicely done, put together well with a clean rhythm. Bittersweet topic but handled well. Good use of repitition without being monotonus. Very glad you were able to express yourself. I'm sure there are many who have had similar experiences and will be able to relate and perhaps draw a little comfort. Enjoyed it, thanks for your effort. -
That must have been too terrible to imagine, a loss like that
I'd just like to say the poem was beautifully written, you are truly and talented poet and I look forward to more of your pieces.
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Thank you for such a kind comment. I do appreciate it.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Wonderful poem! I loved it and I cant wait to see your future writes also! good job!
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I am happy then that I found the words for both of us sis. Some things fade, tough never go away. Thank you for these sweet words.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Sorry for the tears dear. I am glad you enjoyed this write however. Thank you again, as always.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
You know then that it is a pain that will soften, but never leave. Thank yoiu for this comment. I am sorry for your losses as well.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
I would be wrong to say that wound has healed. Times come about whhen I imagine how he would have been now. Tall or short, think or chubby. I was given a second chance, though I did not see it as such then. Thank you for this kind comment.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
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Another Beauty my dear!!! Unless one has lost a child I believe only a person can honestly comprehend the feeling of what I called Empty Arms when my first child,a daughter, was stillborn.
That was 33 yrs ago and I have always wanted to write about my loss, but even though I had the title I could never write the words.You my friend have done this for me. Jacki -
Wow..this was absolutely beautiful, and I must admit that at the moment I am crying, your words show such raw emotion, you have a way of making the reader feel both your joy and pain..Thank you for sharing.
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Any time dear Billie. We can't run away from our past, but with a faith and gratitude we have to accept what we have.
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BRAVO, and sadden
Wow i see how having a child and losing one can really effect you for i have lost three children to miscarriages and I know the pain you spoke of in this poem. Of Having actully given your child life and then losing him. I'm so sorry Serenity.
Blessed be and with love,
Kayla Lynn -
that is so sad and yet really beautifull.
i'm sorry for your loss, but happy you got another chance.
peace and love -
Such a beautiful and eloquent comment. I thank you so much for the beauty of it.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Criss,
Indeed we do smile through bad times. Thank you for such a sweet comment.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Even in death they can live through our memories. That is what matters. Thank you Sonja.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
such a beautiful feeling imparted here .... no fem with stirring breast, no mother or mother to be, can fail to be moved, nor the romantic, the gallant, the father, the lover .... sad, loving and fabulous .... such is experience ... the expression, is something else .... and all your own >>> EM
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Oh babe, I know how it feels to have been given and to have had taken away. But faith was hard to reckon with.
Your poem is beautiful. You write straight from your heart
and I can hear the words beating with your rythm. I have not
yet found a piece from you that has not moved me...either to
joy or sadness. But you, like me, have learned to smile through your tears. But you have found love in someone and I
think I may have too. Together we are all that matters.
much love ~ criss
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Different and sad poem, but with a drop of faith and joy. It reminds me about my own experiance, but my baby girl was never given to me back. I have my own solace that everything happen's with some reason though we do not like it.
Sonja
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