Drop of Poison
Can you feel it rushing through your veins?
Probably not, but it’s there inside you
Eating away at you
But you can’t feel it yet
Don’t worry it will be slow and painful I’ll be sure of that!
With every single drop
It will be done; DONE I SAY!!!!!
I am sorry my love
I did not want to take it this far
But I feel as if I must:
The bottle I hold
What may seem to be deadly
But it gives you life beyond your years!!!
Drink my love
And pierce your thirst
Drink away all your lies
Drink every single drop
So you can feel the very last of it
The very drop of poison
Please my sweet don’t make it hard for us
My dear I am sorry
My love, my love, my dear sweet love
I am sorry that I took away your quench of thirst
But the last drop should go to me
Yes my dear
I know; you look tired
You are gasping for air
My sweet was the water to thick?
I am sorry; but we will be together
Here look at me
I too feel it rushing through my veins
So we both may die together
Me and my love
Author notes
Written September 18th, 2005
My username is: going to a funeral
A contest entry
- Whatever..just make it good. [astonish me] by borrowing.moonlight.
1000 points, ended June 30, 2008, 160 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is wicked i love it i will help you critique your writes the best i can right now ima goto bed just got home from work and tired as hell when i get up ill be back on your page you got some wicked writes and style for sure
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awww that is so romeo and and juliet. i love this so much that definitely appeals to something i would write. very well done!!! will be adding this to finalists.. thank you so much for entering your 3 in my contest, again i am sorry for your pain but thrilled to see how you have certainly put it into something constructive! so thanks again, and good luck!
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very Shakespeare tradgedy. It reminds me alot of Romeo and Juliet, but you killed them rather than them taking their own life. Very dark, very cool. Great job! I wish you lots of luck with the contest!
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That is a really nice read. Good luck!
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thanks, u have some awesome poems too, sure i would love to be ur sister, i didn't know u loved death, as much as i do!!! lol, we should talk more often...l8r
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this is reallly good and i loved it you are a greta writer and this was a great poem you have real talent here keep it up!!!
love ya
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This poem is really really good. I so loved it much!!! This is cool and you8 did a really good job on writing it. Keep up the work gurl, cuz it's the shiznit lol. Lylas...... ~x Jessica x~
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excellent
i love this...its soo...i cant explain..but i love it...it reminds me of romeo and juliet..
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