When the night comes
And your voice sings to me
I hear the heart beat of serenity's love
In your sweet little sting
In my mind
Enchanted songs are sang
Like a soft spoken lullaby
And gentle drops of rain..
I see you lying there
and tears fall from my eyes
nothing has ever touched me so
for this I can not lie
I fall to my knees
hands wiping away the tears
I am not worthy of this mans love
not even close I fear..
Together we are bound
By words of fluent motion
Like casting waves
that form upon the ocean
And as we build our house
Of hearts, And happiness
The stars race across the sky
To send us their blissful kiss..
Author notes
Kisses from afar
felt within a breeze
held within my arms
in the magic of our dreams
1st two stanzas - robert
2nd two stanzas - vampira1665
3rd two stanzas - robert
Comment poem - vampira1665
Written September 17th, 2005
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ahhhha stunning and OUTSTANDING you got here !
I love this one! very very romantic !
Angel
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It takes a certain level of self confidence to colaborate, to see a greater whole beyond one's love for hearing one's own voice.
This is really a lovely poem, the softer side of the Vamp and an uncommonly engaging Robert Bolin. Not to intimate more than what is there, but you do well for each other's writes. Glad I caught this one.
Peace and moonlight,
~RJ~ -
GOOD JOB TO THE BOTH YOU
LOVE BOTH YALLS WORK
MAY THE DARKNESS GRANT YOU ALL YOUR DESIRES -
What do you mean by, other side of the coin perhaps?
Thanx for the comment!
Hugs, Lady Raven -
Very LOVE FILLED!
Wowzer! Love oozes from this! My My!!!!
Thumpa thumpa!!! Great job!
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yeah a rally nice write indeed especially i loved the lines,In my mind
Enchanted songs are sang
Like a soft spoken lullaby
And gentle drops of rain..
really great poem i absolutely loved the words u both you in it..keep it up .cheers -
great
hey great write very good i really like it
And as we build our house
Of hearts, And happiness
The stars race across the sky
To send us their blissful kiss..
i also really like this paragraph here it is great very good write
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You snuck one up on me. This is great. I loved it. So visual. ~~Shannon~~
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Awwww, very sweet
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woo hoo! sugar high!
this is a well written poem, wonderful descriptive words that really make you feel. thoroughly enjoyed reading this... -
Hmmm the other side of the coin perhaps? I like this one too dear the only word that seemed out of place was "sting." For some reason it just didnt quite click. None the less it was still a good write.
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Thank you for the comment. When we were writing this and I was doin the second set I just visualize tears from seeing perfection like one would when seeing an angel for the first time. And falling to your knees wondering if you are worthy of an Angels love. But of course in the end of this piece they grow in there love within there dreams.
Hugs, Lady Raven -
Wow, this is a very beautiful write, and you are worthy of his love, don't ever think negative like that because it will only cause problems in your relationships, follow your heart, not your mind, for your heart knows when to take the risk.....great write....
much love,
~Chris~
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A very beautiful write. Surely you meant sung and not "sang"
It is a gentle and tender piece - good one - to both of you. -
The two of you did a wonderful job, Though I'd expect no less... Both of you are great writers..
later
RomeoThevamp -
This is a collab between Robert Bolin and I. He did the first and third stanza and I the second so he should get most the credit. I am glad you enjoyed and thank you for the comment.
And I wrote the little poem in the authors comment
Edited on Sep 17, 10:18 p.m. because ''. -
I love the way you wrote this. Very beautiful. You have alot of talent. Great write.
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