In my own arrogance and self-importance what I have set forth is unforgivable
For trying to help a friend, I threw her in harms way
And for that she now has such a horrid scar that is in fact caused by me
For I have thrusted a dear friend into a place where she should never have gone
Now a beautiful lady, is marred by evil’s vile hand
Her lovely words flow so less and will always show their hurt
In my arrogance what hath I wroth upon such beautiful a soul
Would I but have trimmed my words, and not pushed the thought
Then she would never have walked into the pits of hell
Now I see a side of myself that has caused such vile pain
For my words I thought loving were more painful than they should have been
Like daggers they must have struck her lovely breast and drove her away
Thus let all know that her pain was caused by me
As she now must wear the scar of this evil deed
I must bare the burden of the bringer of the cause
I know find myself worthless of her friendship
For what I have done
Yet I worry for her safe return
To her friends again
And her life that once was
In what ever manner that will now be
But I will always know
And none forget this fact
The cause of what happened
Was my Arrogance and self-importance
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Written September 17th, 2005
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Thak you so much my sweet friend...
The truth is and you know it, if we had not talked that night, or I had backed off like a smart man would have, what happened likely would not have. I pushed the first domino down that lead to the events that happened that night... And in that is my fault...
I could not answer... to you earlier... It was hard to see how you responded, such a sweet friend you are. You have never shown a selfish nature to you, but always given...
In truth you have everyright to hate me for my stupidity, instead of letting you just sleep that night... I will have to bare that burden for my own stupidity, and arrogance. -
Well written
A very well expressed poem, and so touching that I can not help but cry.
You are a very talented poet with so much humility and a heart so lovable. Your treat your friends with extra loving care and look after them. But please don't be so harsh on yourself, because I know your friends love you so much.
Please keep on writing!
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splendid
touching yet powerful in words and in deeds.... heartfelt piece... -
Thank you Catz!
Everyone indluding her have been so nice about this. Sometimes not by choice we can set things into motion by our own words.
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A heartfelt write, Dan, but I, for the life of me cannot feature you as arrogant....far from it, from everything I can gleen of you from our chatting and coorespondence, you are a compassionate and loving soul.
We all hurt each other sometimes, and I feel that's part of life, part of what makes our compassion and emotions real. I don't think she blames you for the hurt, but of course only she can really know that for sure. And even if she does, she'll come to recognize that there is no blame, just happenings.
An excellent piece, very well spoken.
Love and
Dee
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maybe this is just your muse? Whtever, the writing was a form I haven't seen .. I know someone who broke someone's neck dwI .. he brags that the helicopter took so long his alcohaul level went down to normal; I think you'll be ok ...
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You are one of the least arrogant men I know. How you could ever label yourself as such, is beyond me. There are other force going on with people that what is visible to the naked eye or even completely known by friends and family. And it's true, we all do what we do for our own reasons. You cannot make or force another to do something. We make our own choices. Right, wrong, good or bad... regardless of the outcome. You have a compassionate heart and you feel very deeply. Don't try to bear burdens that are not yours. You are a wonderful friend Dan!
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Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa, don't make me scream. You are not to blame. You will be no good to her until you realize that. We each do what we do, no one forces us to do things, and by all means you didn't know she would be hurt.Things happen Dan, and until you face the fact that they do, you will keep thinking you are the reason they do. You couldn't stop it, you didn't start it. She needs you strong now, not beating yourself up over something you didn't do. Good that you wrote about it, now use that energy blaming yourself to help her.
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very good
That's great thing that you feel regretting for being arrogant. But, I think it means that you are not really arrogant. Arrogant people never regret. It was one bad moment in your past when you've hurted somebody, but being aware of that means that you always can correct what you've done. -
Very nice
Beautiful, and with a bit of a lilt on the words. Though no rhyme-scheme I can see, I think this is very well structured, and well written. -
oh this was so beautfiul..i loved how it sounded like you were telling a story and wasnt umm poetry sounding iguess. its different. i liked it a lot. beautiful writ eyou have here, be proud! haha
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Very well written
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I really liked this, never read anything like this before, very strong and powerful. Wonderful job, and best of luck to you.
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